Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Few individuals says education of school and universities so much time spent on learning but in other hand the learning practical skills enough time not conume People’s learning new things and knowledge about education but not experience

In this essay we will discuss firstly I will agree with this view because practical skills are most important for the studnet future for example when studnet learning things knowledge about the relevant filed or gain the many new things about the professional filed when students work on university team work and other communication discussions the all topics gain communication skills and successful learning

Secondly practical skills are most important in the Everey life and studnets successful every stage of life whether one students have expertise this field and experience about reltive filed then many apportunties gives many companies by the way people’s for example studnet many skills includes money mange budgets computer skills and other many skills include the relevant filed

In conclusion I agree this statement school or universities gives the knowledge about the fileds And many time waste and note gives the studnet practical skills But on the other hand other people’s experience and have many skills and when people went the job reltive then c v explain the own skills and experience then good impression and better successful future

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address the prompt by agreeing that practical skills are important, the arguments are underdeveloped and repetitive. The ideas lack specific examples or logical depth, and the position is not consistently supported throughout the text. The essay is 220 words long, meaning it is 30 words short of the requirement. Consequently, the response is only partially developed, and the lack of length prevents a more thorough exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'for example' and 'on the other hand' without proper context. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of ideas. The transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion is disjointed, and the lack of clear topic sentences makes the structure feel fragmented. Overall, the organisation of ideas is not sufficiently coherent to support a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and collocation. For instance, the student uses 'conume' (consume), 'filed' (field), and 'reltive' (relative) repeatedly. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary beyond basic, everyday words. The misuse of terms like 'professional filed' and 'Everey life' indicates a lack of precision. The vocabulary is just enough to convey the basic message, but it does not demonstrate the flexibility or range required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement ('Few individuals says'), sentence structure (many fragments and run-on sentences), and punctuation. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors in tense and word order. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, such as 'when students work on university team work and other communication discussions the all topics gain communication skills'. These errors are pervasive and distract the reader throughout the text.

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