Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In contemporary society education plays crucial role in our personality. Education from the kindergarden to higher education is an important. children have to learn about both concepts and skills. Every stage of education gives a lot of knowledge and confidence to the students.

On the one hand, a large number of individuals talk about the level of education. There are numrous kind of population argue that these stages of education. now a days there are many kinds of learning which can provide a lot of knowledge to the students. However, when a kid ready for going to school most of school start their education from the books and course outlet. A large number parents totally agree with it. eucational system give a lot of work to the students and keep practicing unless they are not able to perfect i it. people agree this educational system often spending a lot of time to the same thing is become a boring to the students. Moreover, If students learn from some textile material, sensorial and lab practical work it will confidence, abilities and this is raoid process to the learning.

On the other hand, in some educational departments should take notice and raise their education methods. it is necesssary for junior students to learn practical skills. they will become our future so they have to amibtious about their goals. learning from the mayerial is a long term memory also, it can provide sharpe mind and holding grip. not only students become independent but also thy will become a responsible person.Furthermore, the nagetive key factor about student education in which teacher not provide material to them. this happens bad effect on their mental health also their personality.

For Instance, if student learn a lot of knowledge from books it will be short term memory but another studen learn from the same thing with material and doing practical it will be a long term memory.

In the conclusion, education systems has both ways to educate the students, in addition they should add some more exciting ang thrilling actvities for students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the balance between facts and practical skills. However, the position is not consistently clear throughout the essay. While you argue that practical skills are important, the development of ideas is often hindered by vague phrasing, such as 'a large number of individuals talk about the level of education.' The arguments are present but remain under-developed, lacking specific, well-supported examples. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly relates to your stance and provide more concrete, logical explanations for your claims.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear sentences and awkward transitions. For example, the transition 'On the one hand' is used, but the subsequent points do not clearly contrast with the following paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'in addition they should add some more exciting ang thrilling actvities.' Referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence builds logically upon the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'textile material' (likely meaning 'textbook material') and 'holding grip.' Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'numrous kind of population' and 'raoid process.' While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'kindergarden,' 'numrous,' 'eucational,' 'amibtious,' 'nagetive') restrict the range. To reach a higher band, focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary rather than relying on basic, sometimes misused, terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('education systems has'), article usage ('a lot of work to the students'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and misuse of commas. While you attempt complex structures, they are often faulty, which reduces the overall accuracy. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage will help improve your score in this area.

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