Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, Education is the key of success. It is very useful for the development. Currently, Educaton has dfferent types of Changes in study. All level of educations like primary schools and universities have been dificulties for students education. Mostly education is important to mould of the gretest for the skill management. In many countries are different types of criteria for the students. Eligibility for the examination and good thiking for the level of graduation like Activities and practical knowledge of subjests.

Generally, All students need practical purpose dor develop and educate the contant of idea. Idea become for the exicute main process of the practical skills. You have practical skill, you are able to some Smart skill. You have unique criteria for the able to connect with perosnal and professional development for the all learners.

In all time i agrred because you have a good knowledge, but you have not practical and communication skill, do not survive any places. I give my example, I am a good in an accounting analysis deartment, but I have not speeking skils, I do not develop with my skills, It is very simple. That is the reason, All educator person like all teachers and all faculties, i humble request to you please change the education pattern in our country. We have not use our smartness for in the studies.

I have well time being so, We all go to the letter of Education minister to our child save for the connect in study were use in learing practical skills. we need justice and pleace this update urgent for the all level of bas to primary and last to college level for the new development.

I give my opinion for the all student, I am always agreed for the all level of skill connect to the our education system. That is the reason of education, from primary schools to universities, to much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practis skills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether too much time is spent learning facts rather than practical skills. The candidate takes a clear position agreeing with the prompt and provides a personal example about lacking speaking skills despite being good at accounting analysis. However, the development of ideas is limited and often obscured by unclear phrasing and digressions, such as addressing the education minister and calling for a public petition. While the central topic is recognisable, the argument lacks the sustained extension and robust support required to reach higher bands. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organisation and progression of ideas are frequently disrupted by confusing transitions and erratic shifts in tone. Sentences such as 'Idea become for the exicute main process of the practical skills' lack logical cohesion and make it difficult to follow the writer's line of thought. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, and pronoun referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'You have practical skill, you are able to some Smart skill'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal coherence within the paragraphs is weak, reflecting features characteristic of Band 4 rather than Band 5, though some overarching structure places it at a low Band 5 level.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and frequently inappropriate, with severe spelling and word-formation errors throughout the text (e.g., 'Educaton', 'dfferent', 'dificulties', 'gretest', 'thiking', 'subjests', 'dor', 'contant', 'exicute', 'perosnal', 'agrred', 'speeking', 'pleace'). There are numerous collocation errors, such as 'learning practis skills' and 'give my opinion for the all student'. The range of vocabulary is very limited and often repetitive ('skill', 'education', 'learning'), placing the lexical control firmly at Band 4 due to the frequency of errors straining the reader's comprehension.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms that result in severe grammatical breakdown. There are persistent errors in basic syntax, verb forms, articles, and prepositions (e.g., 'Education is the key of success', 'All level of educations like primary schools and universities have been dificulties', 'I am a good in an accounting analysis deartment'). Errors are extremely frequent and often distort the meaning, causing significant difficulty for the reader. This performance aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptors.

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