Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadays,most of the people are spent their time and just focas on their educational study primary schools to universities.But they not focus enough practical learning.

I fully agree regarding the equipment mention in the question. Because of its totally true.When childern grow up the maximum students and teacher or parrents all of of tehy are bit in others student those who better than he or she.Most of the time they fill jelous and and then they just focus on their study they can not focus what is a actual reality. As a result their brain are working just limitation.Educational study teach us how to make them and bifore long long year ago what happends and how can survive their.But reality is totally different on their books. Because of books gives us knoldge not give us exprience.

Realistic exprience is necessary for a good life but not veirtual reality or just limitation of book not just enough for us.When you face some problem, in your life you try to help your brain and try to practical learning.On the other hand some people when they compleate their greadution they are apply to thir real life what was they are studey.However, every people should on focus their aall levels education with practical learnig and try to spent proper time on practical learning.

To sum up,Those both are importent practical learn ing or all lavels of education.But people are focusing on just education all levels studey that is not enough for their life.When we do someting we learn partical things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether too much time is spent on learning facts rather than practical skills in education. The writer takes a clear position by stating that they fully agree with this view. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times quite unclear due to expression issues. For instance, statements about children growing up and feeling jealous of other students are somewhat tangential to the core debate of facts versus practical skills in education. The ideas are repetitive and lack deep elaboration, meaning the task is only partially addressed. While a position is presented, the arguments fail to systematically explore both sides or provide well-supported examples from the writer's own experience. Consequently, this performance aligns most closely with the Band 4 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the essay suffers from a lack of clear overall progression. Although the text is divided into four paragraphs, the logical links between sentences and paragraphs are frequently faulty or confusing. Transition phrases are either absent or inappropriately used, such as 'Because of its totally true' and 'On the other hand some people...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion of the body paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. Repetition of ideas further disrupts the flow. Pronoun referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'how can survive their' and 'how to make them'), which obscures the connections between ideas. These features reflect the characteristics of a Band 4 performance.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the response is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that frequently strain the reader's comprehension. Examples of inaccurate lexical choices include 'educational study', 'fill jelous' (feel jealous), 'knoldge' (knowledge), 'exprience' (experience), and 'greadution' (graduation). The range of vocabulary is very limited and insufficient to convey precise meanings or abstract concepts effectively. While the writer attempts to use terms related to education, frequent misspellings and inappropriate word forms prevent successful communication of more complex ideas. These persistent lexical limitations place the response firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of structures, and almost every sentence contains severe errors in grammar, punctuation, and syntax. Examples include 'most of the people are spent their time', 'they not focus enough practical learning', 'their brain are working just limitation', and 'every people should on focus their aall levels education'. Complex sentence structures are attempted, but they are consistently faulty and often distort the intended meaning. Frequent structural errors and poor punctuation make reading difficult and require the reader to decode the sentences repeatedly. This level of grammatical accuracy and range corresponds to a Band 4 score.

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