Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The education is most important think in this world now,However without studies or education you can not achive any think in this world. There are many prons and cons of this practice .

To benig with, steps of eduaction Frist of all every child have to have the knowdage about basic education. In today svenario, if you want archive something in your life you have to study but afterall practical knowdage is also very important. Basic levels of studies we all awear of it but the question is that after the graduaction or schooling is it necessry to go higher studies . In my opinon I am agree with that to expand your dgrees. some young poeple wants to do more stuides and doing universities , masters , Phd dgrees. Yes it is time taking stuides. Nevertheless , students are more educated in this world. We can see the technology , machines just becuase of the book knowdage.

On the otherside, I believe that if you want take a small satisfactory job, or you want to start a bussines in you life then there is no need to go with higher education, Rather to take a practical knowdage of your choosen field. If you go with more practical learning skills you have more experience. Although we have to encourge all the students to stuides higher and achive more in thier lifes.

In conclusion, morever the stuide is equally important as much as the practical tests. It is not a time westing process , it is a part of innovation and creation to the world. Goverments gives many education loans, scolarship to the brillent students. They know how much higher stuides eqaully important.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the general topic by discussing both academic study and practical learning, and you give a position that appears to favour education while recognising the value of practical skills. However, the response does not clearly answer whether you agree that too much time is spent learning facts and too little on practical skills. For example, “I am agree with that to expand your dgrees” seems to support higher education, while later you argue that practical knowledge may be preferable for some careers. These points are not reconciled, and the discussion of loans and scholarships does not directly support your answer. State your agreement or disagreement clearly, then develop relevant reasons and examples showing how education should balance facts and practical skills.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting different considerations, and a conclusion. Some signposting, such as “To begin with,” “On the other side,” and “In conclusion,” helps readers recognise the stages of the essay. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from basic education to university degrees and then technology without explaining how these ideas connect to the question. Linking expressions such as “Nevertheless” and “Although” do not always show a clear relationship between the sentences that follow. The conclusion also introduces government loans and scholarships rather than drawing together the main argument. Organise each paragraph around one reason and use clearer references and links between supporting points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to education and work, including “practical learning skills,” “higher education,” “technology,” and “innovation and creation.” This gives you a basic range for discussing the topic. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise, and frequent spelling and word-form errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “knowdage,” “stuides,” and “satisfactory job.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “expand your degrees” and “practical knowledge of your chosen field.” Aim to learn accurate topic vocabulary and common collocations, then check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions would help you explain the distinction between factual learning and hands-on training.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “if you want to start a business in your life then there is no need to go with higher education.” Some sentences communicate a basic idea, and the response includes attempts to connect clauses. However, control is inconsistent: “every child have” has a subject–verb agreement error, “I am agree” uses an incorrect verb form, and “if you want take” is missing “to.” Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also unreliable, as in “The education is most important think” and the run-on opening sentence. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build longer sentences with correct clause structure, agreement, and punctuation.

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