Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Madam

My name is Ereca F. Alfaro and currently using a centre with my family and friends for celebrating my daughter's birthday like a sport theme using the field of pickle ball and the swimming pool for kids and basketball for boys this centre if very important for us as a local community because we can save money because its free and we don't need to travel far so we don't need to find another place and also very near in our home and convinient and also complete amenities .

I think this is will be a popular to other centre because it will be the biggest centre cleanliness and some of staff is very approachable and also this is the only one centre have swimming as far as I know thank you for this kind of centre.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You include relevant details about using the centre with family and friends, such as celebrating your daughter’s birthday and using the pickleball court, pool and basketball facilities. You also explain some benefits, including that it is free and close to home. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the centre’s wider importance to the community is not clearly developed, and you do not describe what might happen to local people if it closes. The sentence about it being popular at another centre is unclear and does not replace this missing point. The response is also 11 words below the required minimum. To improve, cover all three bullet points explicitly and add specific consequences, such as fewer affordable activities for children or longer journeys for families.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response contains a basic sequence: it introduces your use of the centre, gives reasons it matters, and adds a further comment about its facilities and staff. This gives the reader some sense of the intended message. However, nearly all the information is placed in one long paragraph and several ideas run together, making the progression difficult to follow. For example, the sentence beginning “My name is…” moves from a birthday celebration to community benefits without a clear break. The repeated use of “and also” does little to show how points relate, while “this is will be a popular to other centre” interrupts the flow. Use separate paragraphs for your use of the centre, its community value and the effects of closure, with clear linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “swimming pool,” “basketball,” “free,” “amenities” and “approachable.” These choices help communicate the facilities and practical benefits you have in mind. There is also an attempt to use more specific terms, such as “pickle ball,” although the standard spelling is “pickleball.” However, several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, including “using a centre,” “sport theme,” “popular to other centre” and “the only one centre have swimming.” These make parts of the message difficult to interpret and show limited control of collocation and word forms. Aim for clear, natural phrases such as “use the centre,” “a sports-themed party” and “the only local centre with a swimming pool.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect several ideas in longer sentences, and the reader can identify the main message despite grammatical problems. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts to combine clauses are often faulty. For example, “My name is Ereca F. Alfaro and currently using a centre” lacks a subject and a finite verb in the second clause. “This centre if very important” has an incorrect verb form, and “I think this is will be” combines incompatible verb constructions. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “the biggest centre cleanliness.” Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check verb forms and punctuation. Shorter, accurately controlled sentences would make your meaning easier to follow.

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