Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to express my concerns related to proposed closer of sports centre.

I have joined gold sports club membership two years earlier for cricket practice. It do have huge impact on my life as I get opportunity to meet other players who shares same interest as me. Additionaly, I provides guidance to enhace skills to opt cricket as a career.

Sports centre and leisure centre are not only beneficial for its members but also plays imperative role in locals life. When yougsters visualise the elders while going to sports clubs they get motivates towards sport activities because of which they stay away from bad activities.

As this sport centre have provided opportunities to many players to play at national level by shapes there skills. Provided that, sport centre get closed it would have detrimental impact on local individual. Youngters will loose opportunities due to lack of guidance at the same time local employees will loose their jobs. Therefore, I have a humble request that do not close this sport cenre for the well being of locals.

King regards,

Rajwinder Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and make your position clear: you oppose closure and ask the council to keep the centre open. The details about cricket practice, meeting other players and receiving guidance explain how you use it, while the benefits to young people and the risk of job losses cover community importance and possible effects. These relevant points give the letter a solid response to the task. However, some ideas are less fully developed: for example, the centre’s role in helping players reach national level is asserted without a specific example, and the effects on families or other groups are not explored. Adding one or two concrete details would make the case more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: it introduces your concern, describes your own use of the centre, explains its community value, and ends with consequences and a request. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these stages, and links such as “Additionaly,” “because of which,” and “Therefore” show an effort to connect ideas. At times, however, the connections are mechanical or unclear. “Provided that” does not clearly introduce the consequence of closure, and the sentence about the centre providing opportunities is difficult to connect to the following point. Use more direct transitions and make each paragraph’s main point explicit to achieve smoother progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant and appropriately formal vocabulary, including “guidance,” “detrimental impact,” “opportunities,” and “well being,” which helps communicate your argument. There is also an attempt to use less common expressions such as “imperative role.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “proposed closer,” “enhace,” “yougsters,” and “cenre.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “opt cricket as a career” and “visualise the elders.” Choose familiar collocations accurately before reaching for more formal wording, and proofread spelling carefully. This would make your meaning clearer and give you more reliable control of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea about what might happen if the centre closes. The main message is generally understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to affect ease of reading. For example, “It do have” should be “It does have,” and “players who shares” should be “players who share.” In “the centre … plays … role,” the subject and verb also need to agree. The sentence beginning “As this sport centre…” is incomplete or awkwardly constructed. Practise building accurate clauses first, then combine them using clear conditional and relative structures.

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