Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir or Madam

i am glad to inform you about the canada game center which is located on lacewood rd halifax. its pretty good center me and my friends often visted there to workout and other lesiure activity. i am usally like the gym and pool over there. because as a fitness freak i like to workout 4 to 5 days in a week. and this centere is stone throw distance from residentals area of the city so most of the people preferd to go there by walk and ample varity facalities. create an intrest among local folks. but some time on the is closed due to public holiday and other reason. that time people face difficulty to use the facalities. especially me, due to holiday i have to change my whole workout schedule. so my request is please open the center all the day. thank you consider my massage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the centre and explain that you and your friends use its gym and pool, and you mention that its location near residential areas makes it convenient. However, the letter does not fully respond to the council’s proposal to close it: the final request is to keep the centre open every day, rather than to oppose its permanent closure or explain why it should remain funded. The community’s reliance on the facilities is only briefly suggested, and the effects of closure are not described. Instead, much of the response discusses temporary holiday closures and your personal workout schedule. Develop the community benefits and give specific consequences, such as reduced access to exercise or fewer leisure options for local families.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the centre, describes your visits, gives a reason for its local value, and ends with a request. Basic links such as “because,” “so,” and “but” help connect some ideas. However, the information is not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the shift from the council’s possible permanent closure to occasional holiday closures makes the central argument difficult to follow. Several ideas are joined in long, loosely connected sentences, particularly the section beginning “because as a fitness freak.” Organise the letter into separate paragraphs for personal use, community importance, and likely effects of closure, and use clearer transitions to show how each point supports your request.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “gym,” “pool,” “fitness,” “workout schedule,” and “local folks,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts less clear, such as “lesiure activity,” “facalities,” and “massage” where “message” is intended. Some expressions are also unnatural, including “stone throw distance” and “ample varity facalities.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases that explain the centre’s value and the consequences of closure. For example, “nearby residents,” “a wide range of facilities,” and “access to affordable exercise” would be more precise and appropriate for a formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas using clauses and conjunctions, as in “because as a fitness freak I like to workout,” but sentence structures are limited and these longer attempts are often faulty. Errors include missing or incorrect articles and verb forms in “its pretty good center me and my friends often visted there,” as well as the incomplete construction “because as a fitness freak.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent: the letter begins with “i,” and several sentences run together without clear boundaries. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check sentence boundaries, articles, and tense before submitting.

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