Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir/ma,

I am writing this letter to inform the local council how the importance of the center and also highlight some consequences it would have if center decided to close.

To begin with, I , my friends and family enjoyed the hub so well that we spent close to five hours instead of the two hours we initially booked for. The environment is so conducive and moreso, the topic on how sport can improve all areas of our lives was really touching

Furthermore, I believe this sport and leisure center is very paramount to us because it enables our children to be busy doing something meaningful with their lives.

To conclude, I would like to persuade the local council not to close the center because it would have so many negative effect on our younger generation.

Thanks and be waiting to hear feedback from you.

Yours faithfully,

Ollly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points, though the development is quite limited. You mention how you use the centre, why it is important, and the effects of closure. However, the ideas are underdeveloped; for example, you mention the centre is 'paramount' for children but do not explain what activities they engage in or why these are beneficial. Furthermore, the response is 149 words, falling just short of the 150-word minimum requirement. To improve, you should expand on your points with specific examples or personal anecdotes to ensure a more thorough development of the topic and meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Paragraphing is used, though the paragraphs are quite short. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'To conclude', which help guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes slightly mechanical. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas within paragraphs are linked more fluidly and that you use a wider variety of cohesive devices to connect your arguments more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some appropriate terms like 'conducive', 'paramount', and 'consequences'. However, there are some awkward phrasings, such as 'enjoyed the hub so well' and 'if center decided to close', which sound slightly unnatural. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure you use articles (a/the) correctly. Expanding your range of vocabulary to include more specific descriptive language would also help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'inform the local council how the importance of the center' (missing a verb or preposition) and 'negative effect' (should be plural 'effects'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors throughout the text. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage to improve your control.

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