Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

This letter is to explain how me and other persons often patronize the sports center, I thought it wise to let the authorities to be aware of the significance of the place to the public, the negative impact in the case of closure of the recreational center will affect the health of the masses.

It is imperative to note that the place in question is the only available space that I and other members of our community go for relaxation and sporting activities like , morning exercising, football practice. This is also the only place where our end of the year football competition is always held.

It is worthy to note the possible negative reactions that may come the masses, which over the years has relied on field for most of their sporting and leisure events, people with health challenges that usually depend on the center for their daily exercise will be left to their faith which is not what the council promised us

Thank in anticipation

Agubo Stanley

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain how you use the centre for exercise and football, why it is important for the community, and the negative consequences of its closure. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the impact on the community could be expanded with more specific examples of how the closure would affect social cohesion or local health statistics. While the tone is appropriate for a formal letter, the development of the arguments remains at a surface level. To improve, try to elaborate further on the 'why' and 'how' behind your points to provide a more comprehensive response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, the phrase 'It is worthy to note' is used in a way that feels slightly forced. Additionally, some sentences are run-on, such as the opening paragraph, which lacks proper punctuation to separate distinct ideas. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition to this') would help improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs, making the progression of your ideas feel more natural and sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'imperative', 'significance', and 'recreational'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, you use 'patronize' in a context where 'use' or 'frequent' would be more natural, and the phrase 'left to their faith' is a misuse of the idiom 'left to their fate'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they do limit your score. To reach a higher band, focus on using collocations more accurately and avoiding the misuse of common idioms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Notable issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'me and other persons'), punctuation errors (comma splices in the first paragraph), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'reactions that may come the masses'). While you attempt complex structures, they often contain errors that affect clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and punctuation, particularly the use of full stops to separate independent clauses, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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