Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir/ma,

I am writing this letter to notify you how we enjoyed your center and also to inform you of the likely effects that may happen if the center stops operating.

To be honest, myself, friends and my family enjoyed using the center all through last week. It was indeed a conducive and suitable place for a family hangout. The gym was superb and also the way the swimming pool was design it is so enticing and comfortable for relaxation.

The center has impacted mostly on younger ones in diverse ways. Most especially the various sports it entails. It has helped our children to utilize their time wisely these days.

Furthermore, I would like to inform you that if the center closes it will definitely have negative effects on our youth because they would divert their time to some things that might have affect their lives so badly. I want state here that the center should continue operating for the benefit of our local community.

Thank you in anticipation for a positive response.

Yours faithfully,

Tolly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explain how you use the centre, why it is important for the community, and the potential negative effects of its closure. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of why the centre is important is quite brief, focusing only on children. To achieve a higher band, you should expand on these points with more specific details or examples. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening 'Dear sir/ma' is slightly informal; 'Dear Sir or Madam' is the standard convention.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore' and 'To be honest' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between the gym and the swimming pool feels abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would help the text flow more naturally and improve the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'conducive', 'enticing', and 'utilize'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For instance, 'design it is so enticing' should be 'design is so enticing', and 'divert their time to some things' is slightly unnatural; 'turn to less productive activities' would be more precise. Additionally, there are minor errors in phrasing, such as 'impacted mostly on younger ones' instead of 'had a significant impact on young people'. Expanding your range of collocations will help you reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors. For example, 'notify you how we enjoyed' should be 'notify you how we enjoy', and 'the way the swimming pool was design' should be 'was designed'. There are also issues with verb tense consistency and article usage, such as 'I want state here' instead of 'I want to state here'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will improve your accuracy.

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