Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I am writing these letter to the local council regrading community centre. I would like to share how my friends and family members are using these centre.

Firstly, I would like to share these is the best centre for old aged people for relaxation and meditation . Moreover, children can spend their quality time over here. For example, In evening after completing their studies they can play indoor and outdoor game over here.

Secondly, the local community centre is important for all age of induvials. Here youngsters can play game like volleyball, tennis, etc. Were as elder people can do morning yoga and small party in evening. For instants, old age women's are always planning Kittie party at their home, So if they get place like community centre it will be easy for them to do.

In last, I would like to say that if these type of centre will close it will effect all age group of people. For example, if children are playing game on road that is not safe form them their is a high chances of road accident.

Thank you hope you find these letter useful.

Thank you,

Priyank Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt: describing usage, explaining the centre's importance, and outlining the consequences of closure. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why the centre is important is a bit repetitive, and the example regarding 'Kittie party' is culturally specific and slightly unclear in this context. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are more fully extended and that the tone remains consistently formal, as this is a letter to a local council. The ideas are relevant, but they lack the depth required for a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In last' (which should be 'Lastly'). However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the use of 'these' instead of 'this' throughout the text. While the overall progression is logical, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their intended nouns.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and contains several errors in word choice and form. For example, you use 'induvials' (individuals), 'instants' (instance), and 'regrading' (regarding). There is also a lack of precision in your phrasing, such as 'old aged people' instead of 'the elderly' or 'senior citizens'. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring correct spelling. You rely on simple, repetitive vocabulary, which limits your ability to express your ideas with the nuance expected at higher band levels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, particularly with subject-verb agreement and pluralization (e.g., 'these letter', 'these centre', 'old age women's'). You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'if these type of centre will close it will effect all age group'. The misuse of 'effect' (verb) instead of 'affect' is a common error. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors indicates a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of basic English grammar rules.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.