Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Subject : giving information about centre to local council.

Dear sir / madam ,

I hope you are doing well.Actually ,I told you that how me and my kith and kins use recreational centre in our village . Everyone use this centre both time ether morning and evening and they use it according their choice.

I think that sports and leisure centre is very crucial for local cummunity because they develop lot of skill such as teamwork and they become extovert because they met with new people . They become anot only healthy but also they build their career with the help of sports in a group team . They take a relief from hectic schedule.

If you are closed this is not good for individual beacuse centre in more important in area . There are many effect on people such as obesity,feel lonlessness.

I am request you that please don’t do close the centre .

Best wishes , Kamalpreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: usage of the centre, its importance to the community, and the consequences of closure. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, the explanation of how the centre is used is vague, and the description of the effects of closure lacks specific detail, relying on general terms like 'obesity' and 'loneliness'. To reach a higher band, you should expand on these points with concrete examples or personal anecdotes. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the structure is somewhat simplistic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is organised into short paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression between sentences is often weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and sometimes mechanical or misused, such as the transition 'Actually, I told you that how...'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of ideas. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your thoughts more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express ideas with precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'cummunity', 'extovert', and 'anot', as well as awkward phrasing like 'kith and kins' and 'both time ether morning'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey complex ideas effectively. You should focus on learning common collocations and improving your spelling to ensure your writing appears more professional and polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Everyone use', 'centre in more important'), article usage, and sentence structure ('If you are closed this is not good'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. While these errors do not completely prevent communication, they are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.

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