Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/ Madam

I am writing this letter to bring your concern associated with the closing of city centre. As this location is situated near to residential areas , so it is not challenging for individuals to come and enjoy their inner peace as well as other facilities.

Firstly, there are numerous amenities such as library, ground , and a lot of space for sitting. Also, this is a place, where grey beard people come and have conversation with their friends. Moreover, people and children also enjoy reading books in library as it is a bundle of books. Furthermore, this area is also a source of income for some humans.

Additionally, if this will close , life would be become boring and meaningless. Nextly, humans who sell food and other items will be unemployed just because of this change. Lastly, children who cannot be able to buy books, will not be able to read distinct books. I would like to suggest you that you can modify this area on your early bases rather than destroying other things. Look forward to hear from you.

Yours faithfully,

Jyoti Sharma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: how the centre is used, its importance, and the effects of closure. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the mention of 'grey beard people' and 'bundle of books' lacks the specific detail required for a high-band response. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the expression of ideas is occasionally vague, such as 'destroying other things'. To improve, you should provide more concrete examples of how you personally use the centre and elaborate on the specific community benefits to better support your arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Additionally'. However, some of these transitions feel mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Nextly', which is not standard English. The referencing is sometimes unclear; for example, 'bring your concern associated with the closing' is awkward and does not clearly link to the subject of the letter. Improving the variety and natural flow of your linking words will help move your score higher.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range expected at higher levels. Phrases like 'grey beard people' are informal and imprecise; 'elderly residents' would be more appropriate. Similarly, 'bundle of books' is not the standard collocation for a library. You rely on basic descriptors like 'boring' and 'meaningless'. To achieve a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated, topic-specific vocabulary related to community services and urban planning, and ensure your word choices are natural and contextually accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'life would be become boring', 'children who cannot be able to', and 'on your early bases'. The use of articles and prepositions is also inconsistent, such as 'in library' instead of 'in the library'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these grammatical slips prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of modal verbs to improve your accuracy.

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