Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Write a letter to the local council. In your letter
- give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
- explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
- describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir / Madam,
I am writing to draw your attention to the centre located next to our society.
Firstly, I would like to mention that the centre plays a vital role in our lives. These kinds of local community centres help individuals to stay connected with each other. It includes a lots of fun activities which helps in physical and mental development. Furthermore, my friends and my family members love to spend some time there. As we all know, swimming, gym, exercise, or aerobics can help to reduce daily life stress.
Additionally, I would like to say that the sports and leisure centre is important for the local people who want to become physically fit. Nowadays, people are becoming more aware of their health issues. These centres are also good for the gathering of different cultures or community activities.
Moreover, on behalf of the other community members, I would like to address some possible effects on the local community individuals of the closure of this centre, including:
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You explain how you use the centre, why it is important for the community, and mention the effects of closure. However, the letter is incomplete; it ends abruptly after the colon in the final paragraph, failing to actually list or describe the effects. This lack of completion significantly impacts the development of your ideas. To reach a higher band, ensure that every point is fully expanded upon and that the letter reaches a logical conclusion, including a formal sign-off.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', 'Additionally', and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, the progression of ideas is interrupted by the incomplete ending. The referencing is generally clear, but the mechanical use of transition words could be improved to sound more natural. Ensure that your paragraphs are balanced and that your concluding thoughts are fully articulated to maintain a smooth flow throughout the entire piece.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You use a range of vocabulary that is adequate for the task, such as 'vital role', 'physical and mental development', and 'physically fit'. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'a lots of' (should be 'a lot of' or 'lots of') and 'society' (which is likely used incorrectly to mean 'neighbourhood'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. Try to incorporate more specific collocations related to community services and health to enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'It includes a lots of fun activities which helps' (subject-verb agreement: 'activities' should be 'help') and 'community members... of the closure' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure in the final paragraph is left hanging. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to suggest a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of subject-verb agreement and prepositional usage.
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