Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am Ofonedu Cornelius, a member of the local community under your leadership. I write to you to express how the community centre has been of good usefulness to me, my friends and my entire family at large over the last decade. The presence of this centre has greatly reduce the cost of events for my family and friends. as it is more cost effective to host an event on the city centre than renting a tent.

Secondly the sport and leisure site of the centre has impacted greatly to the lives of most youths of this local community as that severs as a place for recreation for all. if the recent news of its closure is true, this will result to a massive decay of socal lives of most of the youths of this local community. so in view of the , I humbly ask for you to reconsider this decision once more.

Looking forward to your attention this matter

Yours Faithfull

Cornelius

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You mentioned how you use the centre, explained its importance to the community, and described the potential negative effects of its closure. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, you mention the centre is used for events, but providing a specific example of an event would have strengthened the response. Similarly, the impact on youth could be expanded with more detail. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a council, and your position is clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from personal use to community importance and finally to the consequences of closure. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Secondly' and 'if the recent news...'. However, the paragraphing is underdeveloped; the entire body of the letter is essentially one block, which hinders readability. Additionally, some transitions are slightly mechanical or missing, such as the abrupt shift between the introduction and the first point. Improving the use of linking phrases and separating your ideas into distinct paragraphs would significantly improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'cost effective', 'recreation', and 'reconsider'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing or word choice, such as 'good usefulness' (which is unnatural) and 'massive decay of socal lives' (which is imprecise). Spelling errors like 'socal' and 'Faithfull' also detract from the professional tone. To reach a higher band, you should focus on more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary choices sound natural in a formal context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader. Examples include 'greatly reduce' (should be 'greatly reduced'), 'impacted greatly to the lives' (should be 'impacted the lives'), and 'result to' (should be 'result in'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with missing commas and the incomplete sentence 'so in view of the , I humbly ask'. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors suggests a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of verb patterns and prepositions.

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