Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I vividly remember community centre was opened 10 years ago when I was children. and since from that time me and friends are used to go there for social gathering and excercise to do exercise. Also Not only I prefer to visit local community centre for the sports and spend my leisure time but also majority of people of my area does same from years which help them as a medicine specially after long working day when they meet with their friends, it give them sence of happiness. but now we listen a news which breaks our heart is that community centre would be close in some time to build a hotel on same spot. it not only hamper our physical activities but also reduce our social gathing.

your faithfully

Harmanjot

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all three bullet points: usage of the centre, its importance, and the effects of closure. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited and superficial. The letter is also significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the overall task achievement. To improve, you should expand on your personal experiences and provide more detailed consequences of the closure, such as specific health impacts or the loss of a vital community hub. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a council, but the lack of depth prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which is essential for organizing ideas in a formal letter. While there is a basic logical flow from the introduction to the impact of the closure, the transition between ideas is often abrupt. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'and' and 'but'. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks for each main point and employ a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your sentences more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple phrasing. There are several instances of awkward word choices or incorrect collocations, such as 'since from that time' and 'sence of happiness'. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more sophisticated vocabulary related to community and social issues, and ensure that your word choices are contextually accurate. Focus on learning common collocations rather than individual words to improve your natural expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses ('me and friends are used to go'), subject-verb agreement ('majority of people... does same'), and sentence structure ('I vividly remember community centre was opened'). The use of articles is also inconsistent. The response relies mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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