Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Madom,

I am writing this letter to inform you about my opinion and review regarding our new entertainment area in malayattoor. We visited there 2 days ago , me and family enjoyed very well. Peaceful surroundings and greenery is valuable things in that area.

This place is very useful for all local people for maintaining good health. Big number of facilities provided especially sports and leisure activities. Adults are totally engaged with those activities and I took some pictures.i met my friends and relatives there, this will build good relationships with all people and socialize everything with whole people. In our society did a good and priceless thing to people.

Please maintain this area long time and don’t close it. It will affect that enjoyment and healthy life style of people who is spending more time there.

Please check attached photo and see the people happiness and bonding with others.

Regards,

Jonah

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You mentioned how you use the centre, explained its importance for community health and social bonding, and described the negative effects of its closure. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why the centre is important could be more detailed, and the description of the effects of closure is quite brief. To improve, try to expand on your points with more specific examples or explanations to ensure the reader fully understands the impact of the council's decision.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes mechanical. For example, the transition between sentences is often abrupt, and there is a lack of linking words (such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition') to connect your ideas smoothly. The referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'In our society did a good and priceless thing to people,' where the subject is ambiguous. Improving your use of transition words would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is somewhat basic and repetitive. You rely on simple descriptors like 'good' and 'nice' (implied), and some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'socialize everything with whole people'. There are also minor spelling errors, such as 'Madom' instead of 'Madam'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary that is more precise and appropriate for a formal letter to a local council. Focus on learning collocations related to community services and public facilities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'Peaceful surroundings and greenery is valuable things' contains a subject-verb agreement error, and 'people who is spending' should be 'people who are spending'. Additionally, there are issues with article usage and sentence fragments, such as 'Big number of facilities provided'. While your meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevent the writing from reaching a higher level of accuracy.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.