Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my concern regarding your decision to close the sports and leisure center in my neighborhood. The center has become an integral part of our community.

My friend and I often go there for the gym facility, and also take part in other activities. This helps us to stay active and motivated. All kinds of activities are available for youngsters to elderly people. My entire family from children to grandparents come and participate accordingly.

This center plays a more vital role than just a sport center because it improves the relationship and the understanding among the community members. People are getting place to interact with others especially the children and older people who stay home all day.

It would affect negatively the social life of people if it get closed. The motivation among youngster to take a part in the physical activities would be get drained. As a result, they are highly likely to get glued to screens. Therefore, I would like to request a reconsideration of the decision to close the center.

I look forward to hearing a prompt response from you.

Yours sincerely,

Rahul

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response7.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain how you and your family use the center, highlight its importance for community cohesion, and describe the negative consequences of its potential closure. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a local council. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific examples of the activities you participate in or elaborate further on the social benefits, such as mentioning specific programs or events that would be lost. Overall, the response is well-focused and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a formal closing. Each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Therefore' and 'As a result' to link your ideas. However, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother, and some sentences feel slightly disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the center') is consistently clear would help elevate the flow of your writing to a higher level.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'integral part', 'reconsideration', and 'physical activities'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it is somewhat functional and lacks the more sophisticated or precise collocations that would characterize a higher band. For instance, phrases like 'get glued to screens' are a bit informal. To improve, try to incorporate more academic or formal synonyms to enhance the professional tone of your letter, ensuring that your word choices are consistently precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'if it get closed' (should be 'gets closed') and 'would be get drained' (should be 'would be drained'). Additionally, 'take a part' should be 'take part'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice constructions. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you achieve a higher band score in this criterion.

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