Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing to express my concern about closing the centre which is located in my area.

First of all, I would explain that this center is main educational hub not only for me but also for my friends and my family .Because when we have time ,we prefer to visit here and take participate in physical activities as well as read some books thanks to library.

Another crucial aspect of this area is that ,it offers inside playground where a significant number of young generation are likely to play games such as footbal and vallybal .People who are older ,they spend their quality of time to chat with other local people as well as they also play some mental game like chess, which means it is vital for the growth of local community.

In the last ,I would say that if this center would be closed, it will be detrimental effect of the local individual's health ,since they spend their free time on mobile phone instead of indulging in physical and mental work .

I hope you will understand our concern and you will not close the center .I look forword to hearing from you .

Your sincerely,

MANPREET SINGH

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain how you use the centre, why it is important for the community, and the potential negative effects of its closure. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a council. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For example, the explanation of the centre's importance could be more detailed by providing specific examples of how it fosters community spirit. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are fully extended with more nuanced reasoning rather than just stating the benefits.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the task. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Another crucial aspect', and 'In the last'. While these help the flow, the transitions are somewhat mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, though there are minor issues with punctuation and sentence structure that occasionally disrupt the flow of ideas. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your paragraph breaks are used consistently to separate distinct ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'detrimental effect', 'educational hub', and 'indulging'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'take participate' (should be 'participate'), 'inside playground' (should be 'indoor playground'), and 'mental work' (should be 'mental stimulation'). Spelling errors like 'footbal', 'vallybal', and 'forword' also occur. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the score. Focusing on accurate collocations and proofreading for spelling will help you achieve a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the centre', 'a significant number'), subject-verb agreement ('People who are older, they spend'), and conditional structures ('if this center would be closed, it will be'). The use of 'would be' in the conditional clause is incorrect; it should be 'is closed'. While these errors are noticeable, they rarely prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on mastering basic conditional forms and article usage.

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