Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to share our recent trip on the centre. As a whole family we went to the centre and enjoyed playing pickle ball, basketball and everything that the centre offers. We really appreciate the visit because of surrounding was neat and tidy. No hazard was seen. One thing more, administration was very welcoming to all the visitors that were visiting and using the centre. Sports and leisure centre is important for the local community specially during rainy season. Everyone can play indoor games without thinking to be wet.

With the sports and leisure centre our community will be encouraged to engage with sports and socialise with others. With these our community will be more healthier and active with every activity. And maybe the centre can also accommodate children’s who will participate in competitions in the near future.

Hoping that the local council will maintain the centre as well as the users to maintain the cleanliness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points in the prompt. You described how your family uses the centre for activities like pickleball and basketball, explained its importance for indoor recreation during rainy weather, and touched upon the social and health benefits of the facility. However, the third bullet point regarding the 'possible effects on local people if the centre closes' is somewhat underdeveloped. While you mention that the community will be encouraged to engage in sports, you do not explicitly state the negative consequences of closure, such as the loss of a social hub or a decline in physical activity levels. To improve, ensure each bullet point is given equal weight and depth.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is generally coherent, and the progression of ideas is logical. You use basic linking words like 'and' and 'with these', but the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Paragraphing is present, but the structure is a bit fragmented; the transition between the description of the centre and the argument for its importance could be smoother. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition to this') to connect your sentences and paragraphs more fluidly, rather than relying on simple conjunctions.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You use basic terms like 'neat and tidy' and 'welcoming', which are appropriate but simple. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'share our recent trip on the centre' (should be 'at the centre') and 'more healthier' (which is grammatically redundant). To improve, try to incorporate more specific vocabulary related to community facilities and social impact, such as 'recreational facility', 'vital hub', or 'detrimental impact'. Avoid repeating the same words frequently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have several grammatical errors, such as 'children’s who will participate' (should be 'children who will participate') and 'without thinking to be wet' (should be 'without worrying about getting wet'). Additionally, the phrase 'One thing more' is not a standard way to introduce a new point. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to affect the overall flow. Focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions to improve your accuracy.

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