Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Write a letter to the local council. In your letter
- give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
- explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
- describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am sure you are fine. Sir you can give me some detail about the leisure centre. My friend and their family use the sports and leisure centre that are impotant for the local community. you can discuss about the sports and leisure centre that is impotant for the local coomunity. Therefore, people that visit the centre to enjoy yourself and in sports complexes that the peoples palys the different games in evening or whole day. people that can play different type of sports in our daily basis. Much of the people that can back our home timely to play the intersting game at the evening. You can discuss about the centre that are close recently. Mostly, peoples that are disoppionted for their decision. People that can much of leisure of time for our fitness to play them intersting game for the refreshment. Much of the people totally disappoint for close the centre. I hope you can change our dicission to reopen the centre again.
Yours obidently,
X.Y.Z
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the three bullet points required by the prompt, but the development is very limited and repetitive. While you mention that you and your friends use the centre and explain its importance for fitness and refreshment, the ideas are not fully developed. The letter lacks a clear, professional tone appropriate for a formal request to a local council. The content is somewhat circular, repeating the idea of disappointment and the need for the centre multiple times without providing specific details or a persuasive argument. To improve, focus on providing concrete examples of activities and a more structured explanation of the community impact.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks logical progression and effective paragraphing. The ideas are presented in a disjointed manner, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. There is a lack of appropriate cohesive devices; instead, the text relies on repetitive sentence structures such as 'People that can...' and 'You can discuss about...'. The transition between ideas is weak, and the overall structure does not follow the standard conventions of a formal letter. To improve, use linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your thoughts and organise your points into distinct paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to convey your message precisely. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'impotant' (important), 'coomunity' (community), 'palys' (plays), 'intersting' (interesting), 'disoppionted' (disappointed), and 'dicission' (decision). The word choice is often unnatural, such as 'I am sure you are fine' as an opening, which is not appropriate for a formal letter to a council. You need to expand your range of vocabulary and focus on accurate spelling and word forms to improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the peoples palys' and 'Much of the people that can back our home'. Sentence structures are simple and often lack correct punctuation or logical flow. The use of relative clauses is frequently incorrect, as seen in 'people that visit the centre to enjoy yourself'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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