Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I want to express your attention on local center regarding the usage during a course of time.Well my family & freinds activley goes during the weekends and found it massively significant becase it offers wide range of activities for all group ages.It is very captivating for us to engage & meet new individuals for different mind sets.

The center is vital in many aspects to community because it plays a immense role in develpoment to our health and it expand our focus overall.Although the charges are very minimal every one can affroad easily without any problem.

In last we heard a heartbreaking news that center is closing in six months if this happen a huge figure will cut off from many activities this will tend to act as robust downfall on pepole lives directly.If there is no phiyical activities anymore to offer.

Thank you for your prompt attention to this urgent matter.

Yours faithfully,

Sarah Jenkins

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: usage, importance, and the effects of closure. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, while you mention that the centre is 'vital' for health and focus, you do not provide specific examples of the facilities or programs that contribute to this. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a council, and the purpose is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are supported with more detailed explanations rather than general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'In last we heard' is non-standard, and the connection between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother. Some sentences are fragmented or lack clear logical links, such as the final sentence of the third paragraph, which is a sentence fragment. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'captivating', 'immense', and 'robust'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'express your attention on' (instead of 'draw your attention to'), 'massive significant' (instead of 'massively significant'), and 'a huge figure will cut off' (which is unclear). Spelling errors such as 'freinds', 'activley', 'becase', 'develpoment', 'affroad', and 'phiyical' are frequent and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent the message from being understood.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('my family & freinds activley goes'), incorrect verb forms ('if this happen'), and punctuation errors (missing spaces after periods and misuse of '&'). Some sentences are grammatically incomplete or poorly structured, such as 'If there is no phiyical activities anymore to offer.' These errors occur throughout the text and occasionally impede the reader's ability to process the information smoothly. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.

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