Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter for putting your attention towards centres related to sports and leisure.

I mention here that these centres are helpful in various ways for local people and also facilitate all families near about these centres. I am personally using these centres for fitness. Moreover, these Centre also used for public events when its needed. My friends and my relatives mostly held meetings in these places. It is not only use for sports even when someone feel alone, bored and mentally disturb then mostly old people meet at these places to reduce these types of problems.

For making good health of local people sports Centre is very important in many aspects. Also, leisure center is that place where most of our festival events are held and this is the place where even children and old age person meet each other and spend time together.

So, if these centres close then there is big loss for all ages people. It is humble request that thinks about decision again and considers our request.

Yours Faithfully,

KARAM

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: how you use the centre, why it is important, and the effects of its closure. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention using the centre for fitness and meetings, the descriptions lack specific detail. The explanation of the centre's importance is also quite general. To reach a higher band, you should provide more concrete examples or elaborate further on the social and health benefits to demonstrate a more thorough response to the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some linking words like 'Moreover', 'Also', and 'So' to connect ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the logical progression is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'I mention here that these centres are helpful'. The use of cohesive devices is adequate but could be more varied and natural to improve the overall flow of the letter. Improving the transition between your personal usage and the broader community benefits would enhance the coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally sufficient to convey your meaning, but it is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'centres' and 'places' rather than employing a wider range of synonyms or more precise terminology related to community facilities. There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'mentally disturb' instead of 'mentally distressed' or 'mentally struggling'. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to public services and social interaction to demonstrate a broader range of lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I am writing this letter for putting your attention' (should be 'to draw your attention'), 'when its needed' (should be 'when it is needed'), and 'all ages people' (should be 'people of all ages'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and consistent verb tenses will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.

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