Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well, I am writting to inform you that the uses of comuntity centre which used accompanied by my friends and family. It is untilize for various ways like older one use it for walking and, young people use it for playing. It has become an promeninet part of people of my locality. That helps them to become as fit as fidle.

However, if it will close it left some negative effects on their 's life which is people become more lazy, it leads some helath issues. For childern, they will start using mobile phones , computer and other source of entertinment that effects on their eyes. Through this they will get less chance to get along with each others.

So, all in all i can say that you will understand my conern and think twice about it.

Thank you for your understanding.

Your Sinceraly,

Jaspreet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The candidate addresses all three bullet points required in the prompt. First, details are given regarding how the centre is used by family and friends, mentioning activities such as walking and playing. Second, the importance to the community is highlighted, noting that it has become a prominent fixture that helps locals stay fit. Third, potential negative effects of closure are described, including increased laziness, health issues, and children spending more time on devices with less face-to-face social interaction. Although the ideas are somewhat basic and contain some underdeveloped phrasing, the requirements of the task are adequately met overall. The tone is appropriately semi-formal for a letter to a local council, following the conventional opening and closing structure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is organised into clear paragraphs, beginning with an opening salutation and ending with a formal sign-off. However, the internal cohesion and logical progression between sentences are frequently faulty. For example, sentences such as 'I am writting to inform you that the uses of comuntity centre which used accompanied by my friends and family' exhibit awkward referencing and lack smooth transitional links. The connection of ideas within paragraphs feels disjointed, and punctuation errors further disrupt the flow of reading. While there is an overall structure, the mechanical use of cohesive devices and unclear pronoun referencing place this performance firmly within the Band 5 category.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and frequently inaccurate. The student attempts some less common items such as 'promeninet', 'fidle' (fiddle), and 'entertinment', but these contain noticeable spelling and word-choice errors. Phrases like 'uses of comuntity centre which used accompanied by' and 'it left some negative effects on their 's life' demonstrate inadequate control of word formation and collocation. Although the meaning can generally be deciphered, the high frequency of lexical errors causes considerable difficulty for the reader and restricts the score to Band 4.5, which rounds to 5.0 based on standard descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense misuse such as 'if it will close it left some negative effects' and subject-verb agreement issues. Punctuation is also problematic, marked by comma splices and missing apostrophes. While simple sentences are sometimes understandable, attempts at more complex structures frequently result in faulty syntax that impedes communication. These persistent errors reflect a typical Band 4.5 to 5.0 profile.

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