Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Write a letter to the local council. In your letter
- give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
- explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
- describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear sir, I hope you are doing well, I am writing to express my knowledge and point of view regarding importance of local center in our town.As you know all the relity of our young people specialy students are very bust with studies and social media. they did not spend some time for physicaly activity. but i want to encourage everyone for sports activity so that is most important to arrange a sport center or club ect. Moreover,fitness is more important than others,if you help us for this project that would be improve sports skills in the students or kids as well.local community should be more active ,supported,comfortable and relex when they walk in the center spend leisur time with neighbours or friends.their mental health will be better with the passage of time,i hope you understand my all suggestion and will be waiting from your positive response soon. Yours faithfully, Maham Ali
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the prompt by discussing the general importance of sports centres and physical activity. However, it only partially answers the specific bullet points required by the task. While it mentions the importance for young people and students, it provides very little detail on how the writer and their friends or family actually use the centre, and it fails to adequately describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes, touching upon mental health only very briefly. The ideas remain limited and under-developed throughout the letter. Because the specific details required by the task bullet points are missing or superficial, the response aligns best with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks proper paragraphing and has severe mechanical issues with spacing, punctuation, and capitalisation. Sentences are crowded together or unnaturally separated, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters in places. While basic cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'if' are used to link clauses, the overall organisation is disrupted by poor formatting and run-on sentences. There is no clear overall progression or structured layout expected of a formal letter to the local council. These persistent structural and formatting weaknesses place this criterion firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, featuring frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations. Examples include 'express my knowledge' instead of 'views', 'very bust' instead of 'busy', 'physicaly activity' instead of 'physical activity', and 'relex when they walk in the center spend leisur time'. There are also several spelling mistakes, such as 'relity' for reality, 'bust' for busy, and 'relex' for relax. Although the meaning can mostly be deciphered with effort, the range is limited and noticeable errors restrict the score to Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response, featuring a very limited range of sentence structures. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation, such as 'they did not spend some time for physicaly activity', 'that is most important to arrange', and 'that would be improve sports skills'. Punctuation is largely neglected, with comma splices and missing periods creating run-on sentences. Complex structures attempted by the student are consistently faulty. Due to the high frequency of errors that cause some difficulty for the reader, this criterion falls into the Band 5 category.
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