Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam.

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter regarding importance of centres in town for local community and some common effects on public if in case you decide to close these centres permanently.

To begin with, My old parents are retaired and they love to spend their time in community centre because me and my wife are usually at our work and they have nothing to do at home. Not only my parents but also my children are always very excited to spend their evenings with their friends and playing various games in community centre and outdoor park.

I personally believe that, leisure and sports centres are very advantageous becasue they assist community members to build their excellent social relations with other members. Moreover, sports centres play their vital role to maintain good public health. Different age group members perform their physical activities by playing different sports and activities and yoga.

In case, if these centres are close local people would like to spend thier most of the time at their homes and further it could effect social relationship between members. In addition, children will lose their interest in physical activities.Later on, it could effect their health and well-being.

I will appreciate you if you would pay your consideration regarding this matter. I look forward hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Raven Tall.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You successfully covered all parts of the prompt. You described how your family uses the centre by mentioning your retired parents and children, explained its importance for building social relations and maintaining health, and detailed the negative effects of closure, such as isolation and a loss of physical activity. Your tone is appropriately formal for a letter to the local council, and your purpose is clear from the beginning. However, some of your ideas could have been extended further with more specific detail to push into higher bands, such as describing a specific activity your family enjoys. Overall, you met all task requirements well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

Your letter has a clear overall progression and logical organisation. You used paragraphs effectively to separate different points, starting with family usage, moving to community benefits, and concluding with the effects of closure. You incorporated cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'In addition' to link your ideas together. However, some referencing is slightly mechanical, and occasional punctuation issues (such as a missing comma after introductory phrases) detract slightly from seamless flow. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately, making your letter easy to follow throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrated an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'advantageous', 'well-being', and 'physical activities'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'retaired' instead of retired, 'becasue' instead of because, and 'effect' instead of affect in several places. Despite these errors, communication is never impeded, and your vocabulary choices are generally appropriate for a letter addressing a local council. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on eliminating spelling mistakes and expanding your use of precise collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You displayed a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the use of subordinate clauses such as 'Not only my parents but also my children are...' and conditional structures like 'In case, if these centres are close...'. There are several grammatical errors and punctuation issues, notably redundant phrasing like 'writing this letter regarding importance' (missing an article), 'centres are close' instead of closed, and 'effect' used as a verb instead of affect. While these errors occur regularly, they rarely impede understanding, and your sentences are generally coherent. Working on article usage and verb forms will improve your control.

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