Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Write a letter to the local council. In your letter
- give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
- explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
- describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter to give our experince about the services, which are provided by the centre.
The community centre is very useful for us. My friends and I are using it for spending quality time with each other. Even, I have seen many families along with kids enjoying the water fountain, swings in the park, and also reading magazines.
The centre has given so many benefits to the people. This not only gives opportunity to stay healthy but also giving chance to improve art and craft actuvities. The bonus point is that all of these services are free. Therefore, everybody loves to go in the centre.
People may experience inconveince if this will close. The local residents are highly depending on the centre to spend time with their famliy, they may feel disturbed by this. Moreover, There are many students who are currently enrolled in swimming classes, and there is no any other place in our community. Therefore, it can affect people negatively.
I hope you would accept our request.
Yours faithfully,
Jaspal Kaur.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response successfully covers all the bullet points outlined in the prompt. You gave details of how you and your friends use the centre, such as 'spending quality time with each other' and seeing families enjoying the 'water fountain, swings in the park'. You explained the importance of the centre by highlighting its health benefits and free services, and you described the potential negative effects of closure, mentioning inconvenience to residents and students in swimming classes. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a local council. However, some ideas are slightly generalised or could be developed with a bit more depth, placing this performance solidly at Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The letter follows a clear logical arrangement, moving from the purpose of the letter to personal use, community benefits, and finally the consequences of closure. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas, fulfilling standard letter-writing conventions. Cohesive devices are employed, such as 'Even', 'Moreover', and 'Therefore', although some connectors feel slightly mechanical or repetitive (e.g., starting consecutive sentences with 'Therefore'). Referencing is generally clear, such as 'this centre' and 'these services'. While the overall organisation is coherent, the somewhat repetitive use of basic cohesive devices limits the score to Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing you to successfully convey your message to the council. You attempt some less common vocabulary, such as 'experince' (misspelled), 'inconveince' (misspelled), and 'actuvities' (misspelled). There are also some collocation and word choice inaccuracies, such as 'give our experince' instead of 'share our experience' or 'give our views', and 'is no any other place'. While you attempt to express a range of ideas, frequent spelling errors and minor awkwardness in word choice place this at a Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'I am writing this letter to give our experince about the services, which are provided by the centre' and 'The local residents are highly depending on the centre to spend time with their famliy'. There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures throughout the text, including tense and preposition issues like 'are using it for spending' (instead of 'use it to spend'), 'giving chance' (instead of 'gives a chance'), 'go in the centre' (instead of 'go to the centre'), and 'if this will close' (instead of 'if this closes'). These errors occasionally cause slight strain for the reader, resulting in a Band 5.5 score.
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