Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my concern regarding the closure of the local sports centre. My friends and the local community use this facility on regular terms and it plays a vital role in our life.

We usually visit the centre every morning for our local morning walk and other young members use this as a running track for their upcoming sports events as well as i have seen the older community group use this centre as a local meetup group where they all meditate and do yoga.

As you know that, this is the only centre for brampton community whereas the other one is 15 kms away from this location and i think it is also very important for our local community to be fit and promote local activities and fitness.

So therefore i urge the council to reconsider the decision for closing the centre.

Thankyou for listening to my concern. Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Amrit sagoo.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You establish a clear purpose—opposing the proposed closure—and give relevant examples of how people use the centre, including morning walks, running practice, and older residents’ yoga and meditation. You also explain its value as the only nearby facility and mention that the alternative is 15 km away. However, the task’s three points are not equally developed: the community benefits are stated generally, and the possible effects of closure on local people are not explicitly described. For example, you could explain that residents might lose access to affordable exercise, become less active, or have difficulty travelling to the distant centre. Developing these consequences and supporting the centre’s importance with specific details would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a generally clear sequence: you state your concern, describe how different groups use the centre, explain its local importance, and make a request. This makes the main message easy to follow. Some connections are less smooth, however. The second paragraph combines several users and activities in one long sentence, while phrases such as “As you know that” and “So therefore” make the links feel awkward or repetitive. The effects of closure would also benefit from a separate, clearly signposted point. Use distinct paragraphs for usage, community importance and likely consequences, and choose straightforward transitions such as “In addition” or “If it closes” to make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “local community,” “running track,” “sports events,” and “reconsider the decision.” These choices communicate the subject and your position. However, some expressions are unnatural or imprecise, such as “on regular terms,” “local meetup group,” and “promote local activities and fitness.” There are also inconsistencies in the formal letter style, including “Thankyou” and the informal-sounding “local morning walk.” Aim for more natural collocations and precise descriptions, for example, “regularly,” “a place for older residents to meet,” and “encourage physical activity.” This would make the vocabulary more fluent and appropriately formal without changing your clear message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, and the overall meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors and punctuation problems are present, particularly in longer sentences. For example, “As you know that, this is the only centre” has an unnecessary “that,” and “as well as i have seen” needs clearer sentence structure and capitalization. The sentence beginning “We usually visit” also joins several ideas without clear boundaries, making the relationships between them harder to follow. Review sentence boundaries, capitalization of “I,” and article and clause patterns. Breaking the long description into shorter sentences would improve accuracy while still allowing you to show a range of structures.

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