Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you about centre that offers many positive effects.

We are using centre for many purpose. We all are leading hectic life style. This centre make us able to enjoy with family and friends after work. We feel active and happy.

Sports are crucial for well being of society. Therefore, new sport centre give us chance to come fit and health. We also get chance to improve our social life and make new friends . Leisure centre help us to reduces stress and make rejuvenate.

If this centre closes, it will brings negative effects on people lives. People will not get an opportuinty to become socialise with other. They may not pay attention towards physical acitivites. As a result, they may become physically weak and suffer from health issues.

I look forward to hearing you soon,

with faithfully,

Kirandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three bullet points: you mention using the centre with family and friends, its role in fitness and socialising, and possible health and social consequences if it closes. However, the details are quite general. For example, “We are using centre for many purpose” does not explain what activities you and your friends or family actually do there, and the community benefits are asserted rather than illustrated. The effects of closure are clearer, but could be developed with specific consequences for different local people. The letter is also two words below the stated minimum. Add concrete examples and a little more explanation to make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening, a paragraph about personal use, one about community value, and one about the effects of closure. This makes the main points easy to locate. Linking expressions such as “Therefore” and “As a result” help show relationships between ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes abrupt: the move from family enjoyment to feeling active and happy is not explained, and several short statements read like a list. The opening also does not clearly preview the specific purpose of the letter. Use clearer links between each claim and its explanation, and ensure the closing formula is appropriate, to make the organisation feel more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “hectic lifestyle,” “well being,” “social life,” “stress,” and “health issues.” These choices communicate the general subject, but the range is limited and some phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which makes parts of the letter less clear. For instance, “come fit and health” and “make rejuvenate” do not express the intended ideas naturally, while “become socialise” is an incorrect word form. There are also spelling errors such as “opportuinty” and “acitivites.” Build a more precise set of collocations for exercise, community participation, and wellbeing, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response relies mainly on short, simple sentences, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “Therefore” and “If.” Errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns and verb forms, sometimes making the reader pause. Examples include “This centre make us able,” “it will brings negative effects,” and “Leisure centre help us to reduces stress.” Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “about centre” and “many purpose.” The conditional sentence about closure is a useful structure to develop, but it needs accurate verb forms. Practise subject–verb agreement, infinitive patterns after “help,” and article use, then combine some related ideas into controlled complex sentences.

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