Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter

• give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre
• explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community
• describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I would to give some expression that recently our family visited to leisure centre of the local community. We all have enjoyed more and it has been great experience of all. Really appreciate with facilities and accomodation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5

The opening identifies a relevant experience: your family has visited the local leisure centre and appreciated its facilities. However, the letter does not address the main purpose of writing to the council: it gives no request to keep the centre open, no explanation of its value to the wider community, and no possible effects of closure. The details of how your family uses it are also very limited. In addition, the response is 41 words, below the required 150, so there is not enough content to fulfil the task. To improve, explain specific activities and who takes part, describe community benefits such as affordable exercise or social contact, and state what residents might lose if the centre closes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response has a basic letter opening and its few sentences stay on the general topic of a family visit, so the reader can identify the subject. However, there is no clear progression from describing use of the centre to explaining its community importance or the consequences of closure. The ideas are compressed into one short paragraph, and links between them are not developed. For example, “We all have enjoyed more” does not clarify what the family enjoyed or connect that experience to a reason for keeping the centre open. Organise the letter into paragraphs for personal use, community value, and effects of closure, using simple links such as “In addition” and “If it closes”.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a few relevant terms, including “leisure centre”, “local community”, and “facilities”, which make the topic recognisable. The range is nevertheless narrow, and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “give some expression”, “visited to leisure centre”, and “appreciate with facilities and accomodation”. These choices make the message less clear and do not yet show flexible control of vocabulary for a formal letter. Use more precise phrases for activities and community benefits, such as “attend fitness classes”, “provide affordable recreation”, or “serve as a meeting place”. Check spelling as well: “accomodation” should be “accommodation”; in this context, “facilities” may be more suitable than “accommodation”.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response uses short, simple sentence patterns, and the basic meaning—that your family visited and enjoyed the centre—can be understood. However, grammatical control is uneven. “I would to give” is missing the verb form needed after “would”, while “our family visited to leisure centre” has problems with the verb pattern and article use. “We all have enjoyed more” also uses an awkward tense construction and leaves the comparison incomplete. The sentences do not demonstrate much range beyond simple statements. Practise accurate formal openings such as “I am writing to express my concern”, and build longer sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “My family regularly uses the centre, where we take part in swimming and fitness activities.”

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