Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures.

Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The print and electronics media usually attach pictures of evens and personalities, which some have describe as helpful and just writen words.

Unarguably, the use of picture evidences and imagery to depict a scenery or to show the personality been referred to is more appealing to most reader or people watching the show, it is expected that proof of the event be shown for people to believe the story, also images of individuals being shown on TV are always important for the masses who may have not seen the person, It is also a means of attracting more readers and audience.

My take on the issue, is simply to advise both the prints and electronics media to attach more pictures or images to their stories because, It is like a proof or evidence that the story is not fabricated and on the side of pictures of celebrities and political personalities, some person's attention or reasons for watching the show or reading the newspaper might be to recognize the faces of their political actors, which make the show attractive to many subscribers.

I am convinced that both the print and TV stations have over the years modified the quality of the pictures there attach to stories that is consumed by customers because it speaks volumes about the standard of the organization and the reliability of their story. For instance I watch a TV show here in Nigeria, titled the political class, one of the reason I like the program is because politician come to be interviewed and I hear and see them defend their actions and inaction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion that pictures are effective in media. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention that images act as proof and attract audiences, the arguments remain repetitive and lack depth. The examples provided, such as the mention of the 'political class' show, are relevant but could be better integrated to support the central argument more persuasively. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-supported point rather than restating the same idea in different ways.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression between ideas is sometimes disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'also' and 'for instance', but they are often used mechanically or incorrectly, such as starting sentences with 'also' or 'it is'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede clarity. For example, you use 'electronics media' instead of 'electronic media' and 'evens' instead of 'events'. Phrases like 'some have describe' and 'there attach' show issues with verb forms and pronoun usage. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the range is limited, and the errors in basic word forms prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some person's attention... might be'), incorrect verb tenses, and punctuation errors, such as comma splices. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper grammatical structure, which makes the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, and using punctuation to separate independent clauses effectively.

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