Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures.
Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
I agree with the statement that pictures display by TV news and newspapers are more effective than words. I will explain the reason in deeply
Nowadays TV news and many newspaper company are using picture for awareness in the public as well in young youths so that they should know what's is going on the National and International problems. In the year 2015 News company with the help of police starting using photos in the their headline to make people aware of cases like rape and kidnapping, In fact in teenagers girls they started more so that they should be aware about the cases around all over the world they put a fake news and put some picture to show this is how many rapist approach girl and make them go with them , on the other hand in terms of kidnapping they use photos of stranger offering the candy to child and saying that your mother has send me to pick you up and many of child agree with them which result in kidnapping , Due to this there was huge difference in cased from 2010 to 2015, In the survery held by police in 2016 they said in 2010 there were about 3000 rape cases were registered every month but now after 5 years its decrease to 100 cases every months , on the other side about 4000 cases were registered every 30 days about kidnapping which also massively decline by 1500
every month
In my conclusion picture do play an important role and aremore effective than word
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of pictures being more effective than words. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide examples regarding crime awareness, the explanation of why pictures are 'more effective' is not fully explored in terms of psychological impact or accessibility. The statistics provided are specific but appear somewhat anecdotal or fabricated, which is acceptable in IELTS, but the connection back to the core argument could be more analytical. To improve, ensure you explain the 'why' behind your examples more thoroughly to demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks sufficient paragraphing, which is a significant issue for coherence. The body of the essay is presented as a single, very long paragraph, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. While you use some cohesive devices like 'on the other hand' and 'due to this,' the overall structure is mechanical. The conclusion is also very brief and lacks a clear summary of the main points. To reach a higher band, you must organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, two distinct body paragraphs, and a well-developed conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'display by TV news' (should be 'displayed by') and 'in deeply' (should be 'in depth'). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations, such as 'young youths' (which is redundant) and 'make them go with them.' To improve, focus on learning more sophisticated synonyms and practicing correct word forms and collocations to express your ideas more naturally and accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'news company... are using' and 'many of child agree.' Punctuation is also problematic, with many run-on sentences and incorrect comma usage. The range of sentence structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly connected compound sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and plurals, before attempting more complex structures.
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