Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures.
Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In the modern age, news channels and newspapers play a significant role for creating awareness in the world. A significant numbers of people argue that pictures are always way better than reading the whole paragraphs. My essay further going to reveal with few examples that images are beneficial than the words.
In the fast moving Visualisation grabs attention of the readers
Pictures can clear the whole story
Like some words
Find it difficult easy for deaf people
Art plays an significant role
Sometimes what we can’t say on words we can express through caricatures without realving the real idea but still dilevrr the topic
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 104 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you establish a position that images are beneficial, the ideas are presented in fragmented notes rather than fully developed paragraphs. The lack of expansion, supporting evidence, and a coherent conclusion means the response does not meet the requirements for a complete essay. To improve, you must elaborate on your points with specific examples and ensure you reach the required length to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The response is composed of disjointed phrases and bullet-point-like fragments rather than cohesive paragraphs. There is no clear progression of ideas, and the use of cohesive devices is virtually non-existent. The transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt, and the lack of full sentences makes it difficult to follow the flow of your argument. To improve, you should focus on writing complete, well-structured paragraphs with clear topic sentences and use linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'however') to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. While you use some relevant terms like 'awareness' and 'visualisation', there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'realving' (revealing) and 'dilevrr' (deliver). The range is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise, academic language and ensure accurate spelling. Focus on using collocations correctly and avoiding basic errors that hinder the clarity of your message.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is highly problematic. Many of your sentences are incomplete fragments, such as 'Like some words' and 'Find it difficult easy for deaf people'. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order (e.g., 'My essay further going to reveal'). The lack of complex sentence structures significantly limits your score. You must focus on writing complete, grammatically correct sentences with a subject and a verb. Practice basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures to ensure your writing is accurate and easy to understand.
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