Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures.

Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern era, technology is becoming more popular which helps in many ways .

many of the people are saying that the pictures are more better than the words on TV and newspapers. i am totally agree with this statement which i am going to discuss in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, nowadays , creativity and technology becoming great which gains the people interest. To explicate it , many of the individuals are more attractive to the pictures as compare what they write on news paper and tv . they attract with picture first then they read and some of the people's doesn't need to seen the words they easily understand through the pictures. For example, in most of the comic books has a full stories with pictures and many individuals are interested to read but they want with picture because its helps to experience everything about the story what's in it .

Moreover , pictures gives best quality of expressions and emotions . To eleborate it , these days most of the children and other people are interested to watch the full emotions and expression and action through pictures because only words doesn't increase their interest .

For instance, if people only see the word , read the words its not impact on their mood or interest . if people watch the picture they easily understand and get knowledge about that and they will give good feedback about that .

To conclude, picture as compare to the words is more appropriate and easy to understand or all children and other people . picture gives best experience and knowledge .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion that pictures are more effective than words. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that pictures provide better 'expressions and emotions' and are easier for children to understand, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. The example regarding comic books is relevant but not fully explored to support the broader argument about news media. To improve, you should aim to provide more nuanced reasons, perhaps discussing how images provide immediate visual evidence or how they transcend language barriers, rather than repeating the same points about 'understanding' and 'interest' throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'To commence with' and 'To explicate it' are used in a way that feels unnatural. There is also a lack of variety in linking words, with 'To elaborate it' and 'For instance' appearing frequently. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'many of the individuals are more attractive to the pictures as compare what they write', which makes the logical flow between sentences feel disjointed at times.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'good', 'understand', and 'interest'. There are also several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'more better' (a grammatical error that also affects lexical precision), 'attractive to the pictures' (should be 'attracted to'), and 'doesn't need to seen'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, such as 'visual impact', 'convey information', or 'linguistic barriers'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('some of the people's doesn't need', 'pictures gives'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain run-on structures. For instance, 'many of the people are saying that the pictures are more better than the words on TV and newspapers' contains a double comparative error. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic structures prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement.

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