Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures.
Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Unfortunately, some people that picture are more effictive than words new stories on tv and in newspaper are very often accompained by pictures. My opinion is this stories that on tv is more significent or the newspaper. Therefore, In tv to make the video for the different stories to view them clearly and understand them clearly.
In tv to watch them the different stories in different time to watch also in sound. To watch them at the same time video and also listen them sound for same time. TO watch the different stories in different channal on tv at the same sime for no any reason. Watch them at the same time to different story in different language do you understand them. i.e Such as in english, urdu, punjabi etc.
In now a days the usage of the tv is to much deglect for mainly usage of the lcds, leds and mainly usage of smartphones that are mainly use them for today. children that can spent much of the time for smartphones not watch them tv or leds. Usage of the social media that are more interesting them the tv. IN sartphones such as tiktok, youtube that are mainly usage for different stories in different videos.
In conclusion, tv is mainly usage for new stories in daily our every one hour. story that can tell them in tv is very significent for watching
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the prompt effectively. While it mentions TV and news, it does not clearly argue whether pictures are more effective than words. The ideas are disjointed and lack development, focusing more on the medium of television and smartphones rather than the role of imagery in journalism. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop a position. The content is largely tangential, as it discusses the decline of TV in favor of smartphones rather than the comparative effectiveness of visual versus written information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. Paragraphs are not well-structured, and there is no clear progression of ideas. The use of cohesive devices is either missing or misused, such as the repetitive and confusing use of 'In tv to watch them' and 'In now a days'. The transition between ideas is abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. The conclusion does not effectively summarize the main points or provide a final thought on the prompt's core question.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'effictive' (effective), 'significent' (significant), 'deglect' (neglect), and 'sartphones' (smartphones). The student struggles to use precise language to express complex ideas, relying on basic, often incorrect, phrasing. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with any degree of sophistication or clarity, which frequently impedes communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is highly problematic throughout the text. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage, such as 'some people that picture are more effictive' and 'children that can spent much of the time'. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear subject and predicate. The lack of control over basic grammatical rules makes the text difficult to read and understand. There is almost no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the errors are pervasive.
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