Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures.

Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

As the newspapers and the news stories on TV is completed with the help of pictures that given in papers, however the TV shows and the newspapers are playing a vital role towards the attrectiveness by led the pictures on it.

People are loved to see pictures on newspapers and TV shows it sounds attrective and engaged the people for the products they are selling for else the advertisements.Now days people loved to watch shows and newspapers and when they see any photo they can easily grab in there consious mind on the other hands in newspapers older people read on the dailt basis so after they read this they often to tell other about this like there childrens, grandchildrens etc. In sales market belives that after advertisements on these things the sales are increased significantly higher than before it used to be.

In my opinion the pictures are highly efficent for sales and also for the people towards the product for me pictures are should be there i like to watch pictures on newspapers and looking at pictures i can easily understand about the products or a stories according to me the normal news and the TV shows are quiet boring in the term of reading and understand but via pictures pretty well to justify.

Newspapers and the TV shows are highly loved when they used the pictures and stories in that even children below age of 10 can also relates with pictures these companies are highly aware about pictures so they going to add into these all.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt only partially, discussing the general idea that pictures are effective in news and advertisements, but the position is not always clear throughout the essay. The ideas presented are somewhat limited and under-developed, relying on repetitive assertions rather than deeply explored arguments or fully realized examples. For instance, the mention of older people reading newspapers and telling their children or grandchildren is introduced without being clearly tied back to how pictures compare to words in effectiveness. To move to a higher level, the writer needs to present a well-developed, clear position from the beginning to the end, ensuring that every main point is thoroughly explained with relevant supporting details rather than left brief and generalized.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic organization evident in the division of paragraphs, but the response lacks a clear overall progression. The movement from one idea to the next feels disjointed, and cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive. For example, transitional phrases like 'on the other hands' and 'Now days' are used clumsily, and referencing pronouns such as 'these things' or 'they going to add into these all' create confusion regarding what is being referred to. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal logical links within paragraphs are weak. Achieving a better flow requires using a wider and more accurate range of cohesive markers, ensuring each sentence clearly connects to the previous one, and establishing a logical, stepwise development of ideas from introduction to conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for expressing basic thoughts about pictures and news. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word formations throughout the text, such as 'attrectiveness' instead of attractiveness, 'attrective' instead of attractive, and 'efficent' instead of efficient. Words are often chosen incorrectly for the context, such as using 'consious mind' or 'sales market belives'. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted control of word choice, spelling, and collocation. To improve in this area, the writer should focus on expanding their working vocabulary, learning the correct forms of related words (such as nouns, verbs, and adjectives), and paying closer attention to standard spelling and natural collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writer demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on basic patterns where attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors that can cause difficulty for the reader, including problems with subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and article usage. Examples include 'the newspapers and the news stories on TV is completed', 'People are loved to see pictures', and 'pictures are should be there'. Punctuation is also erratic, with run-on sentences lacking appropriate boundaries. To reach a higher standard, the writer needs to practice constructing accurate simple and complex sentences, monitor verb forms carefully, and reduce basic grammatical slips that obscure the intended meaning.

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