Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures.

Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

these days we can see tv news on daily basis often we are regularly see that thumbnail of the news in news paper

mostly folks saying that we get attention to news just because of the main display pictures even the news are simple but demonstrate stories are very eye catching in addtion numerous time the pictures are simple but we when we listen the news the whole story line is different for intance if we see the the adds of news media is saying this news is heart breaking like very sad but in real we are going to see the same news the whole thoery is diffrent we can get the information regarding some personal family issue several times the did the mistakes just to famous their news on the tv and make them pupolar around the world

last month i was at the restaurent and reading the news paper suddenly i shocked when i saw the picture of teen girls killed by his brother when i turened the pages and starts to read that news on that then i reliased nothing happend as the photo displayed the outside that story was just a brother just wanted to gave some useful lessons about lifeto their sisters so that time i got this point that if they print tragic screen shot out the news paper most citizens are rapidly going for that news its just a marketing stratergy and which is weather nor good or bad

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a relevant opinion: the example about a dramatic newspaper photograph supports your view that images can attract attention and may misrepresent a story. However, your position is not stated clearly at the outset, and the response does not fully explain whether pictures are more effective than words overall. The discussion focuses mainly on sensational or misleading images, with little comparison of what written reporting can communicate better. The personal example is potentially useful, but its meaning is difficult to follow and the claim about the story is not explained sufficiently. The response is also three words below the required minimum. State your opinion directly, develop both sides of the comparison, and clarify the example with specific details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening discusses news images generally, and a later paragraph introduces a personal example. This gives the reader some sense of a beginning and a supporting example. However, ideas within the paragraphs are often crowded together, and the progression from attention-grabbing pictures to misleading headlines and then to the restaurant anecdote is not clearly signposted. Several sentences run on, making relationships between points difficult to follow. Linking expressions such as “for instance” and “so that time” are attempted, but they do not consistently clarify the logic. Use separate paragraphs for your opinion, reasons, example, and conclusion, and connect each point explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “attention,” “information,” “marketing strategy,” and “tragic,” and these choices show an attempt to discuss the influence of news images. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “thoery,” “pupolar,” and “stratergy.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “main display pictures” and “famous their news.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “sensationalised image,” “misleading impression,” and “written report” would help you compare pictures and words more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express connected ideas and give a personal example, but sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, and errors frequently make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “we are regularly see” has an incorrect verb form, while “the whole story line is different” is embedded in a long sentence without clear punctuation. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and tense, as in “i shocked” and “teen girls killed by his brother.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns or become run-ons, so the range is limited. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then combine related ideas with accurate clauses and full stops.

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