Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you about a training course, I saw on television last week which will be of great help to my personality and the growth of the company.

The training course comprises of foreign languages like french, spanish, and chinese. This training course will last for 6-months, during this period, I will not be fully present at work as the classes are scheduled three times a week from 8am-2pm.

Furthermore, I will appreciate the financial support of the company to assist me with the required funds to register for this program. If possible to also provide me with salary advance in other to sort out other expenses like purchasing materials for learning and to sort my feeding during this period.

In addition, Foreign language will not only improve my knowledge but also develops the company in terms of communication with foreign investors.

I hope you consider my request and I await your prompt response.

Yours faithfully,

Nnamdi Destiny

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you describe a six-month foreign-language course, ask for financial assistance and a salary advance, and explain that language skills could help communication with foreign investors. The purpose of the letter is clear and the details about class times make the request concrete. However, the benefit to your own job is only briefly explained, and the effect of being away from work three times a week is mentioned without suggesting how duties could be managed. The course description could also be more specific, such as naming the language most relevant to your role or the skills taught. Developing these points would make the request more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: you introduce the course, explain the support requested, describe its potential benefit, and close politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking phrases such as “Furthermore” and “In addition” guide the reader. The progression is generally easy to follow, though some connections feel mechanical, and the final benefit paragraph is very brief compared with the detailed funding request. The opening sentence also places a comma between “course” and “I saw,” interrupting the flow. To strengthen the organisation further, connect the schedule to a practical plan for maintaining your work responsibilities, and use transitions that show the relationship between ideas rather than simply adding another point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for a formal workplace request, including “financial support,” “register,” “salary advance,” and “foreign investors.” These choices make the main message clear. Some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, however: “help to my personality” does not clearly describe a professional benefit, and “sort my feeding” is not an appropriate collocation in this context. “Comprises of” is also an inaccurate word choice; use “consists of” or “covers.” Capitalisation is inconsistent in “french,” “spanish,” “chinese,” and “Foreign language.” Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “professional development,” “cover living expenses,” and “improve communication with international clients.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause in “a training course, I saw on television last week” and the time clause beginning “during this period.” The message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. The opening needs a relative pronoun and no comma: “a course that I saw.” In “If possible to also provide me,” the clause is incomplete; write “I would also appreciate it if the company could provide me…” The verb agreement in “Foreign language will… develops” is incorrect, and “comprises of” has an incorrect grammatical pattern. Review sentence completeness, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation around clauses to improve accuracy while retaining varied structures.

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