Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter regarding training course which will be useful for my job.

Firstly, I would like to describe you how this couse will be help me with my job. This course is about task managment. Learning time period is 4 weeks in-person at Acadia university campus which is located in downtown.

Secondly, I know little about companies learning policy, the company always supportive with employees in certain aspects. It will provide guidance, training and fees for perticular course.

Moreover, I would like to explain how the course will me with current job. Currently, I have management position in this company where I have manage several task within shift hours. That is little hectic for me, and that couse teach me how to manage your tasks in timely manners.

I really appreciate your support. I waiting to hear back from you soon.

Thank you.

Mohammad

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points: you identify a four-week, in-person task-management course at Acadia University, mention possible company support with guidance and fees, and connect the training to managing tasks during your shifts. These details make the letter relevant, but the explanation of company assistance is tentative (“I know little about companies learning policy”) rather than a clear request, and the job-related benefit is only briefly explained. Develop these points by specifying what you want your manager to approve or provide and giving a concrete example of how the course would improve your work. The purpose is apparent, though the letter would be more effective with a clearer, more fully supported request.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable letter structure, with an opening, separate paragraphs for the course and company support, and a closing. “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Moreover” help signal the sequence of points, so the reader can follow the main message. However, these transitions feel mechanical, and the progression is not always clear: the first paragraph says it will describe how the course helps your job, but mainly describes the course itself. The final paragraph repeats the usefulness point without developing it. Use paragraph openings that directly introduce each task point, and connect the course details, requested support, and workplace benefits more smoothly. This would make the organisation feel more purposeful and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “training course,” “management position,” “guidance,” and “fees,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make the writing less precise, such as “couse,” “managment,” “perticular,” and “hectic.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “Learning time period” and “in timely manners.” Choose standard collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, “course duration,” “task management,” and “manage tasks efficiently” would express your ideas more naturally. More precise language for the support you are requesting would also help the letter sound appropriately professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You communicate the main points using mostly short, simple sentences, and there are attempts to link ideas with clauses. However, errors in sentence structure and verb forms occur often enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. For example, “I would like to describe you how this couse will be help me” needs a different verb pattern, while “I have manage several task” has an incorrect verb form and plural. “I waiting to hear back” also needs an auxiliary verb. Practise accurate patterns such as “describe how,” “I have managed several tasks,” and “I am waiting to hear from you.” Adding a few correctly controlled complex sentences would improve range as well as accuracy.

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