Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you regarding latest update on today's magazine about the international conference of infection prevention and control course will be held on October 2nd, in our local city centre.

As our organization belong to healthcare sector, infection prevention and control could be the substantial part of certification for our employees profile. However, as we deal with contagious infections and daily exposure to numerous bacterial and viral disease, this course will boostup my knowledge about how to protect and tackle such problems.

I also want to request a paid day off and a reference letter from your side to enroll my name as a delegate member in this conference.

This course will be added to my resume to grab opportunities in future; as well as, a part of healthacre team, it will improve my skills in managing the daily chaos.

Lastly, please consider my application and i look forward to your prompt response.

Thank you,

Yours faithfully,

Navneet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three requested points: you describe an infection-prevention course and its date, ask for a paid day off and a reference letter, and explain how the training could support your work with infectious diseases. The connection to your healthcare role is relevant, especially the point about protecting people from bacterial and viral diseases. However, some details are less fully developed: the course description is brief, and the benefit to your current duties is less clear than the benefit to your future résumé. Explain what specific knowledge or practical skills you expect to gain and how you would apply them at work. Also, the opening refers to a magazine update rather than clearly stating that you saw an advertisement, and the request could be framed more directly as an application for approval.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: it introduces the course, explains its relevance, makes a request, and closes politely. Separate paragraphs help distinguish the main points, and links such as “However,” “also,” and “Lastly” guide the reader through the message. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some flexibility in linking ideas. At times, though, the connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “This course will be added to my resume…; as well as, a part of healthacre team…” combines two benefits without a clear grammatical or logical link. Use a more direct transition, and make each paragraph focus on one purpose so the progression feels smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of topic-related vocabulary, including “infection prevention and control,” “contagious infections,” “delegate,” and “certification.” These choices make the subject and workplace context clear, and the reader can understand your main points. There are also some inaccurate or unnatural expressions, such as “latest update on today's magazine,” “boostup my knowledge,” and “daily chaos,” which weaken precision and professional tone. “Grab opportunities” is understandable but informal for a letter to a manager. Choose more natural collocations and check spelling, including “healthcare” and “boost up.” More precise language about the course content and workplace application would strengthen the letter’s vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional-style explanation of the course’s relevance and a sentence beginning “as we deal with…”. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. For example, “our organization belong” needs subject–verb agreement, while “the substantial part” and “a part of healthacre team” show problems with articles and sentence construction. The long opening sentence also makes the relationship between the magazine, conference, and course difficult to follow. Review agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and build complex sentences around a clear main clause. Capitalise “I” consistently and use punctuation to separate the request from the explanation.

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