Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr.Smith

I am writing this letter to express my interest in learning a new course. Yesterday, I watched an advertisement about the GPA course which stands for Gentle Progressive Approach. I am truly interested in completing this course.

Although, I am working as a recreation Supervisor in your department in a retirement home setting, where I am dealing with the seniors who are suffering from dementia. I think this course will help me to get more training in handling their behaviour efficiently with proper methods, besides this, I will be able to learn about some techniques to use when during some situations with those seniors who get abusive toward staff verbally or physically. This course will guide the person toward the right steps to be taken in these kinds of circumstances.

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The cost of the completion course is $500, and I would like to request, if a company is willing to help me financially in completing this course. I would be obliged for this assistance from the organization.

I look forward to hearing from you

Yours sincerely,

Many

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you identify the GPA course, ask the company for financial help, and explain its relevance to your work with seniors with dementia. The examples about managing behaviour and responding to verbal or physical abuse make the benefit relevant to your role. However, the course description is brief, and the request focuses only on paying the $500 fee; you could also specify what support you seek, such as full or partial reimbursement or time off to attend. The usefulness is explained, but some points remain general—for example, you do not describe particular skills or how they would improve your daily work. A clearer, more fully developed request and explanation would strengthen the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a generally clear progression: you introduce the course, explain its relevance, make a financial request, and close politely. Paragraphing helps separate these purposes, and phrases such as “besides this” signal an additional benefit. This meets the lower-band expectation of an overall coherent arrangement and shows some of the stronger progression expected at the next level. However, the long middle paragraph combines your job context, course benefits, and examples of challenging behaviour, making the sequence harder to follow. “Although” also begins a sentence without a matching main clause, and “besides this” is not smoothly connected to the surrounding ideas. Use shorter, purpose-focused paragraphs and clearer links between each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of work-related vocabulary, including “recreation Supervisor,” “retirement home,” “dementia,” and “abusive toward staff,” so the reader can understand your professional context. Phrases such as “handling their behaviour” and “financially” also help convey the course’s relevance and your request. There are, however, some inaccurate or awkward choices: “learning a new course” is less natural than “taking a course,” and “completion course” does not clearly describe the fee. “The person” is also vague when referring to the staff member taking the course. These issues do not prevent understanding, but more precise collocations and consistent professional wording would make the letter more fluent and effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including the explanation beginning “Although, I am working…” and the clause “who are suffering from dementia.” The main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical and punctuation errors reduce accuracy. “Although” is used without a main clause, while “I would like to request, if a company is willing…” has an incorrect clause structure. The sentence beginning “I think this course…” is also overloaded, and the stray full stop on a separate line disrupts the punctuation. The opening and closing need complete, correctly punctuated forms as well. Aim to divide long sentences into clear units and check that each subordinate clause is attached to a complete main clause.

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