Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in a training course that I have seen on advertisement. I would like to enroll to the training course, which would be beneficial for myself as well as company's progress.

The course relates to my academic and professional background, called 'Anti Money Laundering'. It includes analyzing data, detect pattern of transactions, and financial analysis, which makes my analytical skills more easier.

I would like to request you that if you could assist me to change my schedule in the eveining. As my current schedule from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m., I would like to finish 2 hours early at 3 p.m. So, I can attend my training course, as all the classes will be started in the evening time.

I believe if I get the opportunity to complete the course, it would be help me and my company to reach their annual goals with significant fraud detections. Since this course has various fields in analyzing, it would be help me to contribute better in the fraud departement.

I look

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main points by naming the Anti-Money Laundering course, asking for an earlier finish, and explaining that it could support fraud detection and company goals. These details make the request relevant. However, the course description and its workplace benefits are only briefly explained, so the reader gets limited detail about what you will learn or how you will apply it. The request for help is also somewhat unclear: you ask to change your schedule, but do not specify whether this is temporary or how long the course lasts. Most importantly, the letter ends with “I look,” leaving the closing incomplete. Develop the course and job benefits with a specific example, clarify the arrangement you need, and finish the letter appropriately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: you introduce your interest, describe the course, make a scheduling request, and explain its value to the company. Separate paragraphs help the reader follow these stages, and links such as “So” and “Since” show how some ideas relate. This meets the expected level of coherent organisation. To make the progression more polished, use transitions that express the relationship more precisely; for example, “So” could be replaced with “This adjustment would allow me to attend.” The final paragraph begins a conclusion, but “I look” abruptly stops the letter and disrupts the ending. Complete the final thought and add a suitable sign-off so the letter feels finished.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “Anti Money Laundering,” “analyzing data,” “transactions,” “financial analysis,” and “fraud detections.” This gives the letter an appropriate professional focus, and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “annual goals” and “analytical skills.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “seen on advertisement,” “enroll to,” “makes my analytical skills more easier,” and “significant fraud detections.” Spelling errors such as “eveining” and “departement” also reduce accuracy. Aim for natural professional phrases, check spelling, and use precise forms such as “detect fraudulent activity” rather than “fraud detections.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause “which would be beneficial” and the conditional structure “if I get the opportunity.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity and control. For example, “I would like to request you that if you could assist me” combines structures awkwardly; write “I would like to ask whether you could help me.” In “As my current schedule from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m.,” the clause lacks a main verb, and “it would be help me” should be “it would help me.” The sentence beginning “I believe if” also needs clearer clause structure. Practise complete sentences, conditional patterns, and accurate verb forms while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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