Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Floyd,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to check whether company would pay for a course that I am willing to do. I saw an advertisement last week in the newspaper for health and safety training which intrigued me. I have been working for SPX technologies for six years and recently, I observed that number of accidents at our plants have significantly increased so I would like to take initiative in order to make our workplace safer for all the staff.

This is a paid course that will going to run for two weeks. I heard from someone that our organization encourages people to enroll in a course that help them in a long term to achieve their desirable results.

This course contain several methods to improve safety at the workplace. It also outline the rules and regulations that every employees should follow. So after completion of the program, I am willing to take participate in health and safety committee.

Please kindly request you to let me know a policy for reimbursement process if there is any. I look forward to hearing from you.

Thank you.

Kind regards,

Vaibhav

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you identify a two-week health and safety course, ask the company to support the cost, and explain that the training could help you contribute to the safety committee. The reason for taking it—accidents have increased at the plants—is relevant and gives your request a clear purpose. However, the company’s possible help is not fully specified: asking about a reimbursement policy leaves unclear whether you want the company to pay upfront, reimburse fees, or provide time off. The course description and its direct application to your current duties are also brief. Develop these points with practical details, such as the fee and how you would apply the training to reduce workplace risks.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: it opens with the request and context, describes the course, explains its workplace relevance, and closes politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and links such as “so” and “after completion” make the main progression easy to follow. This already gives the reader a coherent account. Some connections are less smooth, however: the statement about the organization encouraging courses is not clearly tied to the specific support you are requesting, and “Please kindly request you” makes the closing request difficult to follow. Use more direct transitions and make the purpose of each paragraph explicit—for example, separate the course details from the precise financial or practical assistance sought.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a workplace request, including relevant terms such as “health and safety training,” “accidents,” “workplace,” “rules and regulations,” and “reimbursement process.” These choices make the topic clear, and phrases such as “take initiative” show an attempt to use more formal language. Some word combinations and forms are inaccurate or unnatural, though, including “take participate,” “a course that help them,” and “desirable results.” “Paid course” is also less precise than explaining that the course has a fee. Aim for natural collocations and precise workplace vocabulary; this will make the letter sound more fluent and professional without changing its clear meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and complex sentence forms, including a longer sentence linking your work history, the rise in accidents, and your reason for applying. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. Examples include the missing article in “whether company would pay,” the faulty future form “will going to run,” and agreement errors in “a course that help” and “every employees.” The phrase “I am willing to take participate” also has an incorrect verb pattern. Review articles, subject–verb agreement, plural forms, and verb constructions, then proofread each sentence. More accurate control of these patterns would strengthen the otherwise clear communication.

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