Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir,

I hope this letter finds you well. Today I am writing this letter in order to enroll in training courses that is posted on employment portal and I find this course will helpful for my future.

Commencing with the course details, actually its none other than it is promotion course, which help to get higher position in the future. Due to bundle of work I am capable to do online course because of the flexible schedule. Also, digital way is convenient to me even with the help of this course I can earn handsome salary too.

Moving further, It is my humble request to organization to switch my full time schedule to part time so that I can focus on work and task. I am confident to saying that this program really helps me to get best and higher position in the field.

Thank you for considering my application. If you need any kind of docs or paper please update me and your time is precious to me I look forward to your response.

Yours faithfully

Amritpal

Employ ID- [redacted phone]

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development of ideas is somewhat limited. You describe the course as a 'promotion course' but fail to provide specific details about the content or the provider. The request for the company's help is clear, but the explanation of how the course will be useful for your job is vague, focusing more on personal salary gain than professional contribution. To improve, ensure you provide concrete details about the course curriculum and explain how the skills gained will specifically benefit your current role or the company's operations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your intent. You use some transition signals like 'Commencing with' and 'Moving further' to guide the reader. However, some of the linking is mechanical, and the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'actually its none other than it is promotion course'. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is smoother and less repetitive.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. Phrases like 'bundle of work' and 'digital way' are slightly unnatural in a professional context. You also rely on repetitive or simplistic structures, such as 'get best and higher position'. To improve, try to incorporate more professional collocations and precise terminology related to professional development and workplace communication. Avoid informal phrasing and focus on using words that accurately convey your professional intent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'training courses that is posted' (subject-verb agreement), 'I am capable to do' (incorrect preposition/collocation), and 'I am confident to saying' (incorrect verb form). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and verb patterns. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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