Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter regarding the training course I would like to commence in upcoming times. Recently, I come across an advertisement about infection control and prevention, Which will be start from 12th October.

I was planning to join this course for my professional development.

It will be two weeks program held in Zydus hospitals by Renowned consultants and several infection control nurses. For this, I would be really appreciate if you provide some duty adjustment for those weeks. The lectures and practical session will be at evening. In addition, many educational fairs we have to attend. So, if you could adjust my duty hours I will be grateful to you.

Furthermore, this course allows me to provide excellent care to the patient in our hospital. This will be fruitful for our hospital's reputation. Moreover, I will be the representative of our organization, which create huge impact on the healthcare industry.

I would be really grateful for your support.

Yours Faithfully,

RHP

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: describing the course, requesting specific help (duty adjustment), and explaining the professional benefits. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention the course is about 'infection control,' providing a bit more detail on the specific skills gained would have strengthened the response. Additionally, the request for duty adjustments is clear, but the justification could be more persuasive. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter follows a logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on one of the required points. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition,' 'Furthermore,' and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is clear throughout the letter. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences feels more natural rather than relying on standard list-like connectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'professional development,' 'renowned consultants,' and 'healthcare industry.' There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'commence in upcoming times' (which is unnatural) and 'I would be really appreciate' (grammatical error affecting lexical accuracy). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band. Focusing on more natural collocations and avoiding slightly awkward phrasing will help you improve.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'I come across' (should be 'I came across'), 'Which will be start' (should be 'which will start'), and 'I would be really appreciate' (should be 'I would really appreciate'). These errors are frequent but do not impede the reader's understanding of your message. To reach a higher band, you should aim for greater accuracy in verb tenses and sentence construction, ensuring that your complex sentences are formed correctly.

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