Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

As a member of our company. I want to talk about that. I have seen an advertisement regarding to boost the job, profile of not only me, but also of the company.This is the very golden chance to learn about this training course. If i talk about this course, it related to data analytics It's a very expensive course to learn, but i believe myself and , I know it very help full for our company.

Furthermore, If i talk about this course. this course is data customz. It is a very well known course and many folks completed this courses help to build strong connection with their company and success in life and doing very great job also earn good money but i need a the financial from company. If you help. I will be very grateful to you.

Therefore, this course will help be not only financially but also help to achieve goal, which is still empty. Even make a strong bonding with the company . I hope you can understand my role regarding this course.

Yours sincerely,

Varun Kumar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: describing the course, explaining how the company can help, and stating the benefits. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, you mention the course is 'data analytics' but do not provide specific details about what it entails or why it is relevant to your current role. The request for financial assistance is also vague. To improve, you should provide more concrete details about the course content and explain exactly how the skills gained will be applied to your daily tasks at the company.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is divided into paragraphs, which is good, but the logical flow between sentences is often disjointed. You frequently use the phrase 'If I talk about this course,' which is repetitive and does not function well as a cohesive device. Some sentences are fragmented, such as 'As a member of our company. I want to talk about that.' This makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical rather than natural. Using a wider variety of linking words like 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'in addition' would help improve the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'very golden chance,' 'very help full,' and 'very well known.' There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'data customz' (which is unclear) and 'financial from company' (which should be 'financial support'). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise professional terminology related to business and training, and avoid repeating the same adjectives like 'very' throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with sentence structure, punctuation, and article usage. For example, 'I want to talk about that. I have seen...' contains a sentence fragment. You also have errors with subject-verb agreement and missing words, such as 'I need a the financial from company.' While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on correct sentence boundaries and basic grammar rules will significantly improve your score.

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