Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to request you for online course training for me. Yesterday, I saw an advertisement on social media saying there is a training course that helps employees polish their skills.

Basically, this online course is related to my job, as it divided into sections that how we can attract customers for one particular product. Moreover, I can join this course with the help of company only as it requires some special permissions from the enterprise.

I hope you will help me to get this training because I want to give my best to our company. I am waiting for your response eagerly.

Best regards,

Gagandeep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all three bullet points: describing the course, explaining the company's role, and stating the benefits. However, the development of these ideas is quite thin. For example, the description of the course is vague, and the explanation of how the company can help is limited to a mention of 'special permissions'. Crucially, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which prevents a full development of the ideas. To improve, you should expand on the specific content of the training and provide more detailed reasons why it is beneficial for your professional growth and the company's success.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear opening and closing. Paragraphing is present, though the body paragraphs are very short. The use of cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'as' helps link ideas, but the overall flow is somewhat mechanical due to the brevity of the sentences. To achieve a higher band, ensure that each paragraph contains a well-developed main idea supported by specific details, and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your thoughts more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the message to be understood clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'advertisement', 'employees', and 'permissions'. However, the range is limited and somewhat repetitive. Phrases like 'polish their skills' and 'give my best' are functional but basic. To improve, try to incorporate more precise, professional vocabulary related to business and training, such as 'professional development', 'strategic objectives', or 'enhance proficiency'. Avoid overly simple phrasing to demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'request you for online course training' (should be 'request approval for an online training course') and 'as it divided into sections' (missing 'is'). Punctuation is generally correct, but the sentence structure is somewhat repetitive. To reach a higher band, focus on reducing minor errors and incorporating a wider variety of complex sentence forms, such as using relative clauses or conditional structures to explain the potential benefits of the course more effectively.

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