Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir,

I trust thid letter finds you in the best of your health and spirit. I am writing this letter to inform you about my training course which I have seen an advertisement. i really need this training course is useful for my master's study in abroad.

The training course are in the full stack developer. I am a laravel developer as you known but it is the big step of my career opportunity. This course provided begginer to advanced knowledge. The Node JS, Next JS, Nuxt JS all new languages provided in this course.

The canada first number internation comapny which is IBM provide this course and it is very useful to achieve my goal. I am joining to the course so I request to you please give me this best opportunity for my career.

I hope to get my letter response at the earliest. Thank you so much.

Yours Faithfully,

Sakshi Sonani

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the course, explaining how the company can help, and stating the benefits. However, the development is somewhat limited. While you mention the course is for 'full stack development', the explanation of how the company can help is vague, as you simply ask for the 'opportunity' without specifying if you need financial support or time off. Furthermore, the purpose of the letter is slightly confused by the mention of 'master's study in abroad', which is irrelevant to a professional training request for your current job. To improve, ensure all ideas directly support the request to your manager.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. For example, the transition between the description of the course and the request for support is abrupt. Some sentences are disjointed, such as 'The training course are in the full stack developer,' which lacks a smooth connection to the previous paragraph. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' 'in addition to this') would improve the flow and logical progression of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, including industry-specific terms like 'full stack developer', 'Laravel', and 'Node JS'. However, there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'thid' instead of 'this', 'in abroad' instead of 'abroad', and 'begginer' instead of 'beginner'. Additionally, the phrase 'best of your health and spirit' is slightly unnatural in a professional context. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise professional collocations and ensuring accurate spelling of common terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The training course are'), incorrect preposition usage ('joining to the course'), and awkward phrasing ('I trust thid letter finds you in the best of your health'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is often repetitive. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and refining your use of articles and prepositions to ensure your writing is more accurate.

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