Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- describe the training course you want to do
- explain what the company could do to help you
- say how the course will be useful for your job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear sir,
I am writing this letter to show my interest towards the advertisement that I have seen for the training course which ultimately help me in gaining more knowledge about time management, leadership quality and latest Microsoft office update which in turn will play essential role in building my career in company.
This is two week course so i am looking forward to do this course, I will be great-full, if company help me in paying my course fees. I will make sure that I make balance in both my academic and professional life so that it does not affect the company outcomes.
This course that i am going to do is going to play crucial aspect in my job as i will be going to understand the new technology related to AI which is very important in every individuals life.
Thank you for your time and consideration and looking forward for your response as soon as possible
With regards,
Parneet
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The letter covers all three bullet points: describing the course, requesting company support, and explaining the benefits. However, the development is somewhat limited. The description of the course is a list of topics rather than a detailed explanation, and the explanation of how the company can help is brief. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the specific nature of the training and provide more concrete reasons why the company should invest in you. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the structure could be more professional by using distinct paragraphs for each requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. IELTS letters should be clearly divided into paragraphs for each bullet point to ensure logical progression. While you use some cohesive devices like 'in turn' and 'which in turn', the flow is often interrupted by run-on sentences and a lack of clear transition between ideas. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your arguments more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You use some repetitive phrasing, such as 'do this course' and 'going to do'. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'great-full' (grateful) and 'leadership quality' (should be plural 'qualities'). To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations related to professional development and business contexts, and ensure you are using the correct forms of words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. For example, 'I will be great-full, if company help me' contains a comma splice and missing articles. Additionally, there are issues with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'I will be going to understand'. Punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your score.
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